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    feathers firefangled's Avatar
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    And it does hang together, in a code sort of way. Love funny-mentalist!

    You have to show me how you were able to employ other than left justification.

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    Questions

    what you meant by because

    those sharp sounds,
    skin on skin grinding,
    your blues.

    say you’ve changed

    shall I remember
    I was safe

    pause time
    for a small lie,

    tell me I played
    in the sand
    my new life
    and salty air,

    why foam
    rung the castle
    before the water
    rolling in
    from further out,
    wave after wave

    after wave.

    skin on skin silent,
    sliding snake
    strikes
    snapping branches
    fallen debris
    along the trails of us
    we made

    them,

    are making them
    in these years
    where vanishing begins —

    irregular it was,
    where to go,
    selfish mapping
    seemed to say
    you had changed
    your ways
    he found unknowable,

    lying now

    under a tarnishing stone,

    you,
    not even a pebble
    in his bed of cold comfort.

    What are you giving me
    that seems like love
    and tears,
    that I give back

    because

    there is nothing else
    that lives here in red

    or blue

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    Quote Originally Posted by firefangled View Post
    And it does hang together, in a code sort of way. Love funny-mentalist!

    You have to show me how you were able to employ other than left justification.
    Thanks.

    'code' is the key: code tags specifically, as follows, but without the spaces: [code ] [/ code]. So that's the explanation for why the word's at the top of all this, not that it's part of the poem, but it's not the first time it's been read that way.

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    you only WISH you were aweome enough to drink it.

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    Thanks, blp, for a tip on that.
    Great poem, firefangled.
    I love this bit:

    skin on skin silent,
    sliding snake
    strikes
    snapping branches
    fallen debris
    along the trails of us
    we made

    them,

    are making them
    in these years
    where vanishing begins —
    I just love
    along the trails of us/we made
    jekan, that's just wasting space. I don't see any creativity in it. Try to do something interesting and original next time, anyone could do what you've done. This doesn't require any thought really.

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    A mad rant 23/1/09

    (I express concern for the state of mind of a Mr. S---, who this morning gave me the following lines.)


    In the news yesterday
    they said that
    the shooting of officials from the Chinese Sanlu group
    will melt the east polar ice shelf.
    'Shoot another, no problem!'
    A Beijing
    taxi driver, said.

    Meanwhile torture was banned
    in the US
    not excluding places
    hired for short-term use
    which also cause the water level to rise
    and affect tourism in Venice.

    The moon needs more water.

    We can just hop over
    and fill up its rivers
    after we have made
    enough profit from war
    and jelly babies
    and reruns of reality shows
    and attended the funeral
    of Ricardo Montalban.

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    I think you summed up what the state of network news is doing to us.

    Bill Moyers couldn't have said it better.

    I started to write if he were a poet, but realized he is.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Riesa View Post
    Oven set at 550

    He had the worse sense of timing.
    called drunk when I was nearing
    the crisp edge of Fish Spencer
    Me, without my eight for two days
    thanks to full-moon cats, ill-timed dr. peppers
    and the iron bed across the house
    which shrieks at 3 A.M. with
    childish dreaming.

    I only want to tell you how I feel
    You won’t dissuade me from my thoughts
    with chummy visions of a brighter world;
    I’m unwilling to be converted
    to gods that you yourself will not believe in.
    I’m ugly, torn and wrong about it all,
    I believed the sun was hot,
    I‘ve seen it through my window,
    highlighting my dust.

    Yes! I said, fully convinced he was on to something.
    I couldn’t help reminding him that misery is a slice of life,
    Better than feeling nothing.

    I’ve been called a b..ch so rarely


    Thank you so much Riesa! There is nothing like a good wallow in negativity to make one feel better. It's so refreshing.

    Wow 550! That's heavy duty crispy cooking.

    This is becoming my favorite thread.

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    Yeah, that's really great, Riesa. I hadn't noticed it before, so thanks for pulling it back up, firefangled.

    EDIT
    No wait, I had noticed it before and even commented. Idiot. Something in this poem seems to bring out the fog-brained dimwit in me. 'knock-poem'. And now this.
    Last edited by blp; 01-24-2009 at 10:06 AM.

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    Crinkled as a frozen smile in abstract space
    his forehead loomed, a thicket of frostbitten snaps
    storming the shell of an afterthought.

    Boyish plump cardigans showcased a career
    midstride, jasmine turtles causing inventories
    of available sound, repercussions lounging
    over the sea.

    Findings conditioned to the sound of waves
    against a neon deck, partitioned coasts
    and exagerated conundrums of how it all felt
    up there on the moor, suspense eagerly
    within grasp, suddenly disfigured.



    eh, probably just wasting space
    Last edited by Il Penseroso; 01-23-2009 at 11:00 PM.
    and somehow a dog
    has taken itself & its tail considerably away
    into the mountains or sea or sky, leaving
    behind: me, wag.
    - John Berryman

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    Quote Originally Posted by Il Penseroso View Post
    eh, probably just wasting space
    No such thing in this neighbourhood.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Il Penseroso View Post
    Crinkled as a frozen smile in abstract space
    his forehead loomed, a thicket of frostbitten snaps
    storming the shell of an afterthought.

    Boyish plump cardigans showcased a career
    midstride, jasmine turtles causing inventories
    of available sound, repercussions lounging
    over the sea.

    Findings conditioned to the sound of waves
    against a neon deck, partitioned coasts
    and exagerated conundrums of how it all felt
    up there on the moor, suspense eagerly
    within grasp, suddenly disfigured.



    eh, probably just wasting space
    No, No, I LOVED this!
    The first stanza made me smile HUGELY, which is exactly what I needed this afternoon. Thank you ever so much, my friend!
    [**walks away whistling**]
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    We Rainbow

    why
    rainbows
    bow

    heavy
    in
    locale

    rain
    colors
    pierce

    dismal
    clouds
    redeemed

    how
    brightness
    hides

    purple
    black
    orange

    green
    yellow
    blue

    lambent
    edge
    beyond

    we
    crimson
    are

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    No, No, I LOVED this!
    The first stanza made me smile HUGELY, which is exactly what I needed this afternoon. Thank you ever so much, my friend!
    [**walks away whistling**]
    Thanks kiz. And that's exactly how I felt walking to work yesterday when that first line came to me. I was in such a jolly mood (through the cold) I was damn near skipping.
    and somehow a dog
    has taken itself & its tail considerably away
    into the mountains or sea or sky, leaving
    behind: me, wag.
    - John Berryman

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    Quote Originally Posted by Il Penseroso View Post
    Thanks kiz. And that's exactly how I felt walking to work yesterday when that first line came to me. I was in such a jolly mood (through the cold) I was damn near skipping.
    Well there you go. May you have many more 'weird' thoughts, lol!

    why
    rainbows
    bow

    heavy
    in
    locale

    rain
    colors
    pierce

    dismal
    clouds
    redeemed

    how
    brightness
    hides

    purple
    black
    orange

    green
    yellow
    blue

    lambent
    edge
    beyond

    we
    crimson
    are
    And I loved the simplicity of this poem, fire. 'Weird' poems are becoming more and more my cup of tea, lol. But seriously, these are awesome, people.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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