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    I need to review a sonnet about the love between Peter Pan and Wendy for a community class I teach. The students picked Love and the characters Peter Pan and Wendy and having no experience writing sonnets I find myslef in a predicament! Help?

    I have a first part done but I'm confused on how to finish it.
    A Of Pan and Wendy who soared the sky,
    B None dared to speak any words of disdain,
    A With happy thoughts and a twinkling eye,
    B Flew the boy and girl with their childish game,

    Any one please finish this!
    ABABCDCDEFEFGG ~is the form
    Last edited by Pan'sWendy; 10-11-2008 at 12:00 PM. Reason: adding info

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    I hope it isn't a writing course. Any specifications, type of sonnet, etc.

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    Its not a writing course for me... It must follow the iambic pentameter as stated above. It must also be about the deep love shared between Peter Pan and Wendy.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Pan'sWendy View Post
    Its not a writing course for me... It must follow the iambic pentameter as stated above. It must also be about the deep love shared between Peter Pan and Wendy.
    It wasn't stated above when I read the post, sorry to tell you, as you edited it in later, but either way, the question is, really, why should I bother, and how could should it be (the longer I spend on it, the better it is, but seeing as I am doing your homework for you...)

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    Yes I know it wasn't there when you commented and I'm sorry. I am teaching a class who needs a sonnet of this paticular subject and form therefor it is not my homework at all. Thank you for taking your time to read my question though.

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    Here you go, an hour and 10 minutes.

    On wind I flew, for shadow, window through
    I blew, to you, when nursery doors seemed
    To conceal your fear in the night’s dark blue
    Mystery, as you pirate playing dreamed.

    From father yours, to Neverland, we zoomed,
    Where games no end, and Hook’s defeat we’d pretend
    But tired you of Games’ Delight; wished plumed
    To grow, and live beyond the dream; to bend,

    And age, and like the rose, conceal and thorn,
    And in your father’s house, in mother’s guise,
    Wither, as worm’s terrible glory is born;
    As your fathers’ bounding walls spread and rise.

    The gator, has won in the end, not I
    I was younger, but father and hook more sly.


    Note, I didn't adhere to the metre very strictly, but since I am doing what you should have done for yourself, I feel I did nothing wrong. I just hope this isn't for 6 year olds, as I don't think they'll get it.
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    Note, I just saw your first quatrain, without realizing you added that in later, and all I can say is, I am glad I didn't use it, as it is rather rubbishy, and doesn't even contain argument, which is the centre of Sonnets. And P.S., you cannot open with a prepositional phrase like that without following it up with a verb that matches with it. Milton opens paradise lost with "Of Man's first disobedience", but he ends up following it up with "Sing Heavenly Muse". You just let it float, unless you mean to insist you ended it in the second line, in which case you have a horrible run-on sentence, since those aren't subordinate clauses, or are punctuated improperly.
    Last edited by JBI; 10-11-2008 at 02:18 PM.

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