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    Falling down like an omen lucidnightmares's Avatar
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    every moment leaves behind a smile...

    i wish to write, of beauty and of you
    but it`s hard to think about something,
    i cannot seem to get thoughts through
    as they all flow back to you

    the rivers and streams of my shallow muse
    all creep slowly towards the inevitable
    i guess our minds may be infused
    but my guessing just comes back to you

    guessing what your thinking
    what`s on your pretty mind?
    and my soaring thoughts are sinking
    all falling back to you

    and yet i know you`ll catch them
    arms open like petals of a rose catching the rain
    the storm of my world is fading , leaving behind a gem
    a gem most precious, filled with the memories you left

    nothing more could a life desire
    than to look back upon itself with a smile
    and my world will reach ever higher
    until the heavens await below

    and when you leave, my world will fall
    into a heaven of remembrance
    calming a worldly squall
    an eternity of memories is all i require...

    what i used to be will pass away and then you`ll see that all i want to know is happiness for you and me...

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    I like this one too...you write very well. I love the forth stanza. It is filled with such imagetry and beauty, with the rose, rain, gem, and all. It really caught me and froze me for a second. Thank you so much for sharing this one...it is very nice.

    No matter what lies beyond the horizon, you can always find a guiding light.

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    It is good to have someone to make us smile. You have some nice lines here.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    i wish to write, of beauty and of you

    i don't know why but i just really like that line

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    Your poem reminds me that there are some good reasons for being alive and taking chances!

    goldenrod.

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    Falling down like an omen lucidnightmares's Avatar
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    thanks alot everyone
    this is kind of an important piece to me so your encouragement really means alot to me

    what i used to be will pass away and then you`ll see that all i want to know is happiness for you and me...

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    This stuff is something that speaks lots of what the stuff love is in substance.

    “Those who seek to satisfy the mind of man by hampering it with ceremonies and music and affecting charity and devotion have lost their original nature””

    “If water derives lucidity from stillness, how much more the faculties of the mind! The mind of the sage, being in repose, becomes the mirror of the universe, the speculum of all creation.

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