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    unidentified hit record blp's Avatar
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    Quote Originally Posted by firefangled View Post
    Father comes home,
    sits in a dark sound,
    with brown glass —
    we swallow
    for different reasons.

    In school, birds are not
    taught. At church,
    watching the basket pass;
    in the window
    men are climbing,
    dropping pigeon babies
    from gutters.

    Father comes home.
    Supper stares at me.
    Darkness falls, brown
    glass does not break…

    sleep has wing sounds
    follows the tolling bell
    OK, this time I think you just forgot you were in the bad poem thread, didn't you?

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    Quote Originally Posted by blp View Post
    OK, this time I think you just forgot you were in the bad poem thread, didn't you?
    I only liked the last two lines. The others bothered me enough to call it bad.

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    'Not I,' said the cat. Sarasvati21's Avatar
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    my dog is sleeping
    there in the corner

    she does not know
    what tomorrow holds

    nor does she care

    my dog is dreaming
    there in the corner
    of things which are only
    to be imagined by us

    the dust settles
    on the table above her head

    still she sleeps

    the birds argue
    over seed outside

    still she sleeps

    mothers and fathers yell
    at their kids across the street

    still she sleeps

    forests are burning
    somewhere around the world
    and somewhere around the world
    children are starving

    still my dog lies in the corner

    sleeping
    "I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
    and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
    sunny skies pervade my dreams
    and light the dark of earthly scenes..."

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sarasvati21 View Post
    my dog is sleeping
    there in the corner

    she does not know
    what tomorrow holds

    nor does she care

    my dog is dreaming
    there in the corner
    of things which are only
    to be imagined by us

    the dust settles
    on the table above her head

    still she sleeps

    the birds argue
    over seed outside

    still she sleeps

    mothers and fathers yell
    at their kids across the street

    still she sleeps

    forests are burning
    somewhere around the world
    and somewhere around the world
    children are starving

    still my dog lies in the corner

    sleeping
    Another person who doesn't know what thread they're in I think.

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    This is the computer, that is a bell
    For a poem, haven't I done well?

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    My friend, the phone,
    get's on my nerves...

    because it's rude, I say
    to them, his many voices,
    wanting time in restaurants,
    theaters, and late at night

    and the way he clears his throat
    before he speaks,
    like this is Broadway!

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    Quote Originally Posted by kelby_lake View Post
    This is the computer, that is a bell
    For a poem, haven't I done well?
    Actually, kind of, yeah.

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    'Not I,' said the cat. Sarasvati21's Avatar
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    Another person who doesn't know what thread they're in I think.
    Aw, thanks, blp
    "I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
    and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
    sunny skies pervade my dreams
    and light the dark of earthly scenes..."

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    on my window still there is a plant pot
    next to the plant pot there is a pile of dirt that has fallen out of the plant pot
    inside the plant pot there is less dirt than outside of the plant pot
    maybe i should throw the plant pot away
    but it was the last thing she ever bought for me
    before she commited suicicde
    and now this plant pot
    with its dying flower
    is all that is left
    of the love that blossomed in the april showers
    ''It isn't enough for your heart to break because everybody's heart is broken now.''
    - Allen Ginsberg

    "The whole dream of democracy is to raise the proletarian to the level of stupidity attained by the bourgeois."
    - Gustave Flaubert

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    ask a question and i`ll tell a lie
    tell me something and i`ll find a fault
    praise life and i`ll want to die
    save your money and i`ll rob your vault

    i am a prick of the most miserable sorts
    i kick puppies, steal from babies
    i burp loudly, pull down your shorts
    laugh at the animal with rabies

    and you, you just stare
    eyes glazed in a dumbfound look
    you don`t understand, wer`e a pair
    i am all those chances you never took....

    what i used to be will pass away and then you`ll see that all i want to know is happiness for you and me...

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    Lately the storm cannot break with words
    calm necessitated from an unplush seat
    of simple survival, plucked remembrance
    and sturdy shapes, with magic toes
    feeling through the lawn for strands
    sliding unpegged from inhibition.

    Like glass shadowed from a razor of steel
    cool reflection bores pain with marked precision
    and years harden to a yard of salt.
    and somehow a dog
    has taken itself & its tail considerably away
    into the mountains or sea or sky, leaving
    behind: me, wag.
    - John Berryman

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    Sunshine blocks a ray
    spotted in ancestral lays
    broken into human spirit.
    and somehow a dog
    has taken itself & its tail considerably away
    into the mountains or sea or sky, leaving
    behind: me, wag.
    - John Berryman

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    if only i had time
    to think up a few rhymes
    then i could write a poem
    and post it in this forum

    i heard a crazy rumor
    that this thread had great humor
    so i checked it out
    to see what it was about

    some of these are good
    written better than i could
    after all that good stuff
    is my poem bad enough?
    life becomes too complicated, then it falls apart; to put it back together, you have to break your heart.

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    ~rose.of.night
    may this not blight
    your poetic dreams

    the device of a rhyme
    used all the time
    is vastly over-rated!

    To answer your question: yes-and no......and welcome to the forum!
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
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    lucidnightmares, sarasvati, and firefangled, yours are actually pretty good (I've seen firfangled's elsewhere recently; Jikan and Il Penseroso, yours sink to new heights of badness! I mean that in the best possible way!!

    Here's my modest contribution:


    Alone in Darkness

    the night falls with a silent sigh, cold and alone are we.
    the emotion for which you sacrifice yourself
    flares once, then dies,
    swept away by the abyss.
    all hope must fail.

    your soul thrives no more.
    how could you abandon me?
    spirits surround us, crying,
    We are Fallen.
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
    "Remember, no matter where you go, there you are." Buckaroo Bonzai
    "Some people say I done alright for a girl." Melanie Safka

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