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Fog
the cold damp touching
my hair and cheeks
like the moist fingers of small ghosts
awakened at bedtime and longing
for reassurance
lying
quiescently, subversively,
like an evil dragon,
coiled in a corner
awaiting his prey
swirling like smoke
from a chimney,
it wraps around my ankles
like a slimy monster from
from a childhood nightmare
shivering, I pull up my collar,
and hurry home to you
qimissung
May 25, 2008
Sorry for any confusion; I was just trying to pay a compliment, but your poems are absolutely beautiful. q
Last edited by qimissung; 05-25-2008 at 07:11 PM. Reason: added a forgotten word, changed verbs to adverbs.
Fog
The white lady caresses
Her lover, the Earth—
Snuggling him in soft blankets
That hide their intimacy…
Pendragon
©5/30/08
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
Wow, Pen, that is very very good.
I like yours too, qimi.
I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.
"If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor
Thank you, ampoule.
Excellent metaphor, Pendragon.
NEW WORD....PASTORAL
I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.
"If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor
Pastoral
The shepherd guards his tiny flock—
Is there a wolf among the sheep?
His gaze flies across the wooly dreadlocks,
Is there a set there that aren’t skin-deep?
A wolf within a coat of sheep’s wool,
Is still a wolf, a ravening eerie beast—
No place at all here for canine drool,
He must be certain that there is no doggy feast!
But the night is calm, and the sheep are safe,
No wolves around to cause them pain—
The shepherd collects a wayward waif,
Cuddles up the lamb and goes to sleep again…
The shepherd should sleep very deep:
It’s no problem for him to count sheep!
Pendragon
6/5/08
The word is: Fear
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
Very good, Pen. When I was in a Disciple I class, we had to take bible passages from the old testament and tell what we saw, smelled, heard, tasted and touched. It was a neat exercise and your poem reminded me of that.
I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.
"If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor
Fear
She blinks, knuckles alabaster
White against her dark clothing
She breathes out
Tendrils of fear, twirling, wafting
Psychedelic in all their glory
Rivaled only by the dark fog spilling over
Outside. Watchful, with eyes
Replicate in the darkness
Waiting for your next mistake
Very nice Gilead. I would suggest you post this under Personal Poetry so more people can see it. This thread is considered a 'poetry game or contest' and the current word is pastoral. I just don't want your beautiful poem to get lost. Welcome to the LitNet.![]()
I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.
"If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor
Sorry about that, ampoule. A misunderstanding on my part.
Pastoral
It is twelve in the afternoon:
The clouds are docile and
Lazy in drifting where the wind may blow
To set themselves afloat in the sea of
Magnolia
It is twelve in the afternoon:
The trees stir and
Murmur in anticipation
Of the sun that will cast their shadows
Empty
It is twelve in the afternoon:
The sheep whisper and
Talk amongst them
Placidly waiting for the kill
Still
It is twelve in the afternoon:
The day is hazy and
The sun is high
Nothing moves and all things hang
Uncertain
^^^ This is beautiful, Gilead!! Welcome to the LitNet Poetry Forum.![]()
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"Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon
CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.
Absolutely no need to apologize to me Gilead. I just want everyone to see your wonderful poems. You have captured that moment so vividly.
I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.
"If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
Thank you all for your encouragement!
quoth the raven, "Nevermore."