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    Falling down like an omen lucidnightmares's Avatar
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    question marks?

    when every thought ends with a question mark
    and all we can do is just play out our parts

    we ask and ask without expecting answers
    ideas twirling round like mechanical dancers

    and you`ll question reality without thinking
    you can`t have a good time without drinking

    really on others and their creations
    and all they say is "congratulations"

    praise for ignorance, for it spawns bliss
    and bliss begets sorrow soon to missed

    these thoughts flow like a winding river
    the idea of knowledge makes me quiver

    for knowledge is just a lie with approval
    like a caner just waiting for removal

    question marks pollute our minds
    useless answers we may never find

    but we wait and search, hide and seek
    only to find our muse has gone meek

    what i used to be will pass away and then you`ll see that all i want to know is happiness for you and me...

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    Something about your last line doesn't scan right, there's a break in the flow or something...
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Falling down like an omen lucidnightmares's Avatar
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    ah thank you for your honesty
    this definitely isn`t my favorite, too rushed.
    anyway`s thank you for your time and opinion, it is greatly appreciated.

    what i used to be will pass away and then you`ll see that all i want to know is happiness for you and me...

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    dude, i really like how you wrote this poem, i like the meaning i took from. it just kinda seemed to go.

    too rushed may be correct, needs some proof reading, but i knew what it was saying.

    and i liked it

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    What's a "caner"?
    Also, please remember to hit the shift key whenever you
    write the first person singular, capital "I."

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    Quote Originally Posted by lucidnightmares View Post
    when every thought ends with a question mark
    and all we can do is just play out our parts

    we ask and ask without expecting answers
    ideas twirling round like mechanical dancers

    and you`ll question reality without thinking
    you can`t have a good time without drinking

    really on others and their creations
    and all they say is "congratulations"

    praise for ignorance, for it spawns bliss
    and bliss begets sorrow soon to missed

    these thoughts flow like a winding river
    the idea of knowledge makes me quiver

    for knowledge is just a lie with approval
    like a caner just waiting for removal

    question marks pollute our minds
    useless answers we may never find

    but we wait and search, hide and seek
    only to find our muse has gone meek
    I am indeed moved by your poem and it is really beautiful and I like the way you honestly wrote about truth. A truth that knowledge is an approved lie.

    “Those who seek to satisfy the mind of man by hampering it with ceremonies and music and affecting charity and devotion have lost their original nature””

    “If water derives lucidity from stillness, how much more the faculties of the mind! The mind of the sage, being in repose, becomes the mirror of the universe, the speculum of all creation.

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