LonelyPoet, you write beautifully. Welcome to LitNet. You may want to note that this thread requires traditional haiku syllable counts of 5-7-5. Since it's a "shared" thread, it helps if we're all on the same page.I know we're all looking forward to more contributions from you! For now, may I borrow a word from your 2nd line to fill up the fifth syllable of line three?
* * * * *
Sweet smell of your hair
Inhaled, transformed, becoming
My being in you.
*
"Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon
CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.
my being in you
hearts beating, songs being sung
my hand held by yours
"I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
sunny skies pervade my dreams
and light the dark of earthly scenes..."
my being in you
merges with the selfless thoughts
you adore later
Edit: you beat me to it
my hand held by yours
softened in the confident
summer in your hands
Last edited by symphony; 05-03-2008 at 03:06 AM.
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...the smell of flowers through metal labyrinths.
my hand held by yours
a child's warm tight fist opens
with delightful love
Edit: Now I was late!! Haha.
* * * * *
summer in your hands
daisy petals, count and fall,
a carpet of white
*
"Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon
CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.
with delightful love
my thoughts are taken from me
blown through the sunlight
"I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
sunny skies pervade my dreams
and light the dark of earthly scenes..."
Oh! What a mix-up! Everyone is so fast this morning!
* * * * *
blown through the sunlight
wisps of song disappearing
leaving only love
*
"Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon
CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.
with delightful love
there will be less than needed,
love's never enough
.
...the smell of flowers through metal labyrinths.
man!
well see i can be fast toobut it will be stupid like this:
leaving only love
we conjure the madness, and
the bad sadnesses
.
...the smell of flowers through metal labyrinths.
love's never enough
for those who have never been
loved enough to bloom
*
"Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon
CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.
loved long enough to bloom
roses in the autumn sun
lengthening shadows
"I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
sunny skies pervade my dreams
and light the dark of earthly scenes..."
how confusing!
the bad sadnesses
the kind that have no beauty
painful to the soul
"I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
sunny skies pervade my dreams
and light the dark of earthly scenes..."
both last lines are beautiful, couldnt help:
lengthening shadows
are what hold me in myself
i stand, shadowbound
painful to the soul
torn apart from bodies, selves,
i stand, shadowbound
.
...the smell of flowers through metal labyrinths.
^^^ Magnificent, Symphony!!
i stand, shadowbound
greyness behind, black ahead,
i am paralyzed
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"Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon
CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.
i stand, shadow-bound
trapped outside of the window
ease this choking dark
"I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
sunny skies pervade my dreams
and light the dark of earthly scenes..."
goodness...
I am paralyzed
caught within this spider's web
poor struggling fly
"I’ve tasted all the sweetest creams
and danced with daisies in dazed delight;
sunny skies pervade my dreams
and light the dark of earthly scenes..."
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