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    The Water Lily

    …One stormy night when I was awakened by a thunder in the skies, half asleep, rubbing my swollen, sleepy eyes, I saw my dreams reflecting in the raindrops and falling into the pond, and get dissolved and lost, never to be found again, never to be dropped again….

    On a moonlit night, on my windowpane, as drops of rain trickled
    In the pond outside, I saw the waves, of water as they rippled
    Such an ideal whim, but my heart was grim, in a sense of doom it stippled
    Ah! My thought was crippled

    In a dreamers dream, could so supreme, colors have descended
    It seemed as if, this tale of love, could never soon have ended
    The rainy night, the gusting wind and trees that danced and bended
    But ah! My will suspended

    Then from the dark, so amply smart, a princess or a bandit
    On a chariot made of gold and hue, she smiled at me, when landed
    The moonlight brightened, as it wandered, through the curves her figure presented
    I saw, in awe, enchanted

    Trickling down her dark eyelashes, I breathed heavy, as rainwater washes
    And baths the tall and slender beauty, which every squall of wind adores
    A wave of warmth, and my body astound, as from her lips in a whisper’s sound
    Came a silent song that stole remorse

    But cruel are dreams when they end
    This one followed a similar trend

    When I went to her and tried to touch
    It was mist and rain and nothing much

    In the pain of loss that was to creep
    In a trance I thought what a friend to keep

    A love forever and ever so deep
    And there she was with a smiling peep

    And then I fell asleep
    … Dreaming of the water lily

    …And the dissolved dreams had surfaced again, adhering to the half submerged petals of the water lily…

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    Very impressive, sarim. I love your imagery, and word usage - how rare to find a poet who still rhymes (and rhymes well!).
    In your second stanza, however, the word 'bended,' though it rhymes, should grammatically print as 'bent.'
    I look forward to future poetry, if you feel like sharing. Good luck!

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    This is truly amazing Sarim.
    *Even if I lost all hope, would you believe in me?*

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    Thanks Guys

    Thanks for your comments, they are of value to me.

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    Further Duality

    See this new thread also...
    Last edited by sarim; 01-02-2005 at 05:43 AM.

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    If you have read this poem. Let me know of your thoughts.
    On the mountains of hope, far away; when the yellow, crimson, misled hay
    Through the pending red of sinking sun; falls down its stifling way
    Settling down a bed of green; rattling brown and gold serene
    Of yet charming atmosphere, All is whish is you were here

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