Poetry, one word at a time

[Jay]

You unfold its darkness gently
so that my mind will silently
mellow in its unknown fancy
song -
swiftly, wafting -
strangely falling towards
the abyss.
The
Albatross drifted beyond the great divide.
Brought to revive,
while you mysteriously hide face.
Oh why there is a chase?
Oh life my treasure
Oh child of destiny
Where is the one who brought to breath.
Spicy enigma of unfolding love.
Tell me, tell me!
What secrets
you frivolously
hide within
your soul?
Tell me, Tell me!
What promises have been shuttered
...do tell!
Why are clouds so mysterious when you go
rolling inside the dreams
you bring without,
soulful annihilation of disturbing
concoctions burried deep
inside me!
Why?!
Why
Sadness overcame
me and you become
strangers to allies obligingly
while
our minds keep
life different.
Away with all
pain and sorrow!
Away with them
leave me (in?) peace
I shall wither
alone until life eats life
and everything
goes wrong, everything
disapears, torture is

[Jester]

You unfold its darkness gently
so that my mind will silently
mellow in its unknown fancy
song -
swiftly, wafting -
strangely falling towards
the abyss.
The
Albatross drifted beyond the great divide.
Brought to revive,
while you mysteriously hide face.
Oh why there is a chase?
Oh life my treasure
Oh child of destiny
Where is the one who brought to breath.
Spicy enigma of unfolding love.
Tell me, tell me!
What secrets
you frivolously
hide within
your soul?
Tell me, Tell me!
What promises have been shuttered
...do tell!
Why are clouds so mysterious when you go
rolling inside the dreams
you bring without,
soulful annihilation of disturbing
concoctions burried deep
inside me!
Why?!
Why
Sadness overcame
me and you become
strangers to allies obligingly
while
our minds keep
life different.
Away with all
pain and sorrow!
Away with them
leave me (in?) peace
I shall wither
alone until life eats life
and everything
goes wrong, everything
disapears, torture is

forever

[Jay]

That's an end? I mean... it looks it, lol. If it is could we start a new thread? Like maybe... Stanza 2

[Jester]

sure.... (ill start it again)

[subterranean]

What..the end already? at 152th post...???

[Jay]

Go looky for a thread called Stanza 2
Ok, here, lol: http://www.online-literature.com/for...ead.php?t=3508

[subterranean]

But Jay, it was only reached 152th post...too short

[Jay]

I know what you mean, but reading the 'end',

disapears, torture is

forever

it looked like an end (well, to me), and I only suggested that perhaps it COULD be the end, it's not the lenght that matters (take haiku for example), and well, no one said you couldn't continue with this one (but we ARE continuing it, just in another thread and you need to copy/paste less text, makes it more... 'in one piece', sorry, can't remember the word)
Hey, in the end, when there's like... 10? threads (10 stanzas), we could... ok, you (as you like your poems LONG ) could put them together in one loooong poem (just like the alt. haiku compiled thread).
Still angry with me?

[Jester]

so what are your interpretations of stanza one? there probably hundreds