Poetry Contest

[Orionsbelt]

Right hand, Left hand
Yinging, singing, yang
Two by two by two by two
Bilaterally symmetrically similar

North Pole, South pole
Four floating orbs
Two turtle doves
Divided there, in the middle

Man made, stone brigade
Natures shade
Cascading barriers
Falling down grey stone

Hey you
Seek you
Reach you
Similar not the same

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[dramasnot6]

LOVED the poem Orion!
Very...balanced

[jab]

Your poem was moving and convincing at illustrating the impossibility of successfully running away. And, to top it all off, as I began to feel like an expert on such things, for being educated by your poem, you turned it all around in the last line and reminded me that we mustn't condescend the runaway. Very moving, in sum, connecting me with emotional insight, brotherhood, and introspection!

[rintrah]

Some more wonderful entries! Thanks to all who have submitted. If you haven't submitted yet you still have some time.

BTW, thanks Adolescent09 for your kind compliment - very much appreciated.

Good luck all!

[Orionsbelt]

LOVED the poem Orion!
Very...balanced

Thanks! Especially since balanced is the last word people use when they talk about me.

[AdoreroDio]

Your poem was moving and convincing at illustrating the impossibility of successfully running away. And, to top it all off, as I began to feel like an expert on such things, for being educated by your poem, you turned it all around in the last line and reminded me that we mustn't condescend the runaway. Very moving, in sum, connecting me with emotional insight, brotherhood, and introspection!

Thanks! I like turning things around and giving different views of one thing in one poem. Some people say I'm contradicting myself but I think it makes for a more interesting poem.

[autolycus]

Introduction

An electron has four quantum numbers,
A human being made of dust has five:

Friendships - number and degree, deception;
Hardships - in sense of quality and weight;
The will - to live, or die, or vegetate;
Strangeness - of the inner mind's perception;
Magnetism - attractive kinds of state.

These are the things which keep our songs alive,
Distill the stuff of dreams from our slumbers,
Make sense of both pre- and post-conception.

Deduction

Given that electrons exist
Here is a little human list:

Humans can be bond-paired
Humans can be non-bonding
Humans can be so very scared
When other humans are responding

Humans can be lone-paired
Humans can be radical in bent
Humans can be startlingly shared
By what seems a human accident

Reduction

I realise I am a singularity
I look out of a window which cannot be:

And I see at once with blinding clarity
Electrons are fortunately not like me.

[ktd222]

Nice poems. Seems like people are waiting till near the due date to enter their poems

[Pendragon]

Nice one, Orion! Could almost hip-hop to that one! Are the smiles the last line? If so, neat idea!

Pen

[Pendragon]

OK I'll try this "contest", here goes

A twenty-one year old runaway



I sat there listening
just listening
his tale fascinating
drawing me in
yet all that ran through my head was
a twenty0one year old runaway
running away is for two year olds
maybe 12
but not twenty-one
you cannot runaway from life
he will find it were he's going
he's a twenty-one year old runaway
bags packed
cigarette in hand
and I can't help thinking
Can I run away to?



I don't know if it's that great but.....

I think it's very good! I'm 46, and God knows there's times I feel like running away myself! You hit the bullseye, Dore'do!

[thefemalemind]

Took me a few readings to really grasp the poem, but I like it, Female Mind! Not bad at all. Good show!

thanks. i usually dont write like that. ill do better next pic.

[Orionsbelt]

Nice one, Orion! Could almost hip-hop to that one! Are the smiles the last line? If so, neat idea!

Pen

Thanks Pen,

The smiles occured to me as I was posting it. I thought it would be a fun addition. Glad you liked it.

[dramasnot6]

OOo that gave me an idea for the personal poetry forum, does anyone like the idea of a smiley poetry game/contest/misc. poetry thread?
Maybe it will turn out better than the How do you do EMOTICON STYLE? thread

[Pendragon]

Could work, Drama. One vote, anyway!

[rintrah]

OK, time for an update: there's one more day to post your entries in this round! I'm in the UK, so I will post an 'event closed' message 8am GMT 7th March. Thanks for all our entries so far!