Escape

[atiguhya padma]

I’d like to lie down in a field
Free from humanity
And gaze up at the mass of clouds
Set in a sky-blue sea
I’d like to scream and shout aloud
Where nobody could hear
And walk amongst the cornstalk crowd
Where I could disappear
Just flee the ghosts, this dusty street
The humid Underground
And tread the peace beneath my feet
The path that I have found
To breathe the stillness of the air
To drink the silence down
To wander wayward everywhere
Beyond the creeping town
I’d love to leave this all behind
Swim in an endless sea
But I am burdened by a mind
That has no liberty

[malikm24]

I can associate with it so much and the last two lines are so apt.....

[Miranda]

AP I think this is a great poem. I love its sense of freedom and escaping from everything, leaving it all behind. I like the way you have reversed the usual imagery for the sky and put the sea where the sky should be...(this poetry rhyming is catching!) I can imagine 'drinking the silence down'. But I think the last line, though brilliant is contradictory..cos if ever there was a poem that showed a mind that has liberty, this is one. I love its rhythm and its rhyme too and it reads easy and naturally.

Miranda

[atiguhya padma]

Miranda,

Thanks for your appreciation and criticism. I can see what you mean by the last line. It should really be about loss of physical freedom. Although, at the time, I knew I had to return to concentrate on work, so there is a sense of lack of mental flexibility too.

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it.

AP

[GimmyDiamond]

LOVED THIS POEM!!!! Man do you rock!!! And I quite disagree with Miranda . . . it's those very feelings of being penned up, caught, trapped, claustrophobic (however one would choose to describe it) which gives birth to the yearning to be free and leave it all behind . . . almost a hunger to be an endless sea, not just in one, making yourself beyond what can be contained . . . just my thoughts anyways . . .

[atiguhya padma]

Thanks GD.

Glad you like it. I'm also glad to see that this poem has produced quite different views from posters. After all, I reckon that's what writing should do.

AP

[Pendragon]

Nice poem, AP! Would make a nice Echo From the Edge. You can feel the trap closing on you and the struggle to shove aside the bars and be free. I think we all stand at that point sooner or later, but few could express it so well.

Pen

[atiguhya padma]

Thank you, Pendragon.

I'm glad it meant something to you. You are right. We all probably feel incarcerated at some time in our lives. Often it is the case that we are both the gaoler and the prisoner.

AP