Shine - Not that good, just a draft =) Comments accepted

[Angelic Devil]

Snapped Pieces
puzzled quotes
startled eyes
silent notes

To have it all
To lose it yet again
For a second I felt whole
Seconds later it was a loss than gain

the wind blows
my heart beat slows
my pain shows
my love rose

my eyes all wet
my heart so still
happiness, I cannot get
my dreams, i cannot fulfil

the little sunshine of tomorrow
the little left to dream
The aching insides so hollow
it is never as easy as it may seem


Shine, they say
Become you, live
Cling to life, survive, stay
Learn to forgive

Why lie to me
Why make me a goddess
Then alone and shattered you let me be
Stealing the little I had of prowess

[Triskele]

Why make me a goddess
Then alone and shattered you let me be
Stealing the little I had of prowess

veeeeeeeeeery nice, this particular piece of your puzzle stuck out to me, keep it up, i look forward to reading more of your work

[Angelic Devil]

veeeeeeeeeery nice, this particular piece of your puzzle stuck out to me, keep it up, i look forward to reading more of your work

Thanks,

[dramasnot6]

It's got a great beat and rhythm! Well done!

[Angelic Devil]

dammit wrong post lol sorry