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    A hotel room in Florida

    In the stunned heat of
    a day in July
    A woman is leaning from
    the fifth-floor window
    vodka at elbow
    she watches the evening
    rob the yellow from this day

    she checked in 2 days ago
    her breathing has changed
    from panicky
    to shallow, to normal

    across the highway a heron
    standing on one leg
    is lost in thought
    letting the world go by
    as it must

    she carries the vodka to bed
    lifts the glass and drinks
    listening to the electric buzz of insects
    tires humming over concrete
    planes moving through time zones

    it is the time to kill time
    lying back on the bed
    she lights a cigarette

    the stillness of a hotel painting
    looks placidly her way
    sensing the evening shadows
    lengthening across the room.

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    Interesting tension in this vignette. Enjoyed

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

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    Quote Originally Posted by tailor STATELY View Post
    Interesting tension in this vignette. Enjoyed

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    decent review. Thanks Tailor.

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    Enjoyed the poem, Tony. Here the loneliness and the ennui seems to be less uncomfortable than in other recent poems.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    Enjoyed the poem, Tony. Here the loneliness and the ennui seems to be less uncomfortable than in other recent poems.
    thank Danik. I have always plannned to write more comfortable poetry, but then emails, groceries and a bunch of other stuff just get in the way.

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    Lol! Modern life and good modern poetry are uncomfortable, I guess, Tony.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
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