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    I took my girlfriend on holiday this weekend

    I took a holiday with her
    to some small island
    the kind the travel magazines call
    undiscovered
    though the whole place smelled like
    other people’s sunscreen
    and bad decisions.

    we rented a room
    near the water.
    she wanted beaches,
    hammocks,
    sunsets that meant something.

    i wanted
    a table,
    a pot of coffee,
    a quiet corner to bleed words into.

    so every morning
    she stepped out into the island—
    into its empty bars,
    its wobbling streets,
    its souvenir vendors
    selling the same dream in different colors.
    and i stayed inside,
    typing like a man trying to scratch
    his way out of his own skull.

    around noon she’d come back,
    hair full of salt,
    eyes full of someone else’s stories.
    she’d lean against the doorway
    and start talking—
    about a fisherman who swore the ocean
    owed him money,
    or a little boy chasing chickens
    through a church courtyard,
    or a stray dog who followed her
    like he’d known her in another life.

    and i’d sit there,
    coffee going cold,
    listening to her pour the island
    into the room.
    everything she said sounded better
    than anything i’d written.

    “you should’ve come,” she’d say.

    “i did,” i’d answer,
    tapping the keys,
    pretending the words were enough.

    and maybe they were.
    maybe this was how i loved—
    clumsily,
    from the safety of a chair,
    while she brought me the world
    in handfuls
    and I tried to make a poem about
    the whole damn thing.

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    Your protagonist's muse; a vicarious relationship... sad in a way. Enjoyed

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    Enjoyed the poem though the relationship doesn't work so well, things aren't done together. But there is your different, original perspective.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    Enjoyed the poem though the relationship doesn't work so well, things aren't done together. But there is your different, original perspective.
    "Interesting... uum, different"

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