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    Writing Style

    This morning, I sat at the kitchen table,
    coffee mug fogging my glasses,
    deciding to write a poem:
    melody instead of meaning

    I began with Miles Davis:
    short lines, cool as the rim of the cup,
    spaces between thoughts
    where the silence mattered more
    than anything I might say.

    Then I shifted to Springsteen,
    rolling up my sleeves,
    telling stories of factory towns and lovers
    under rusted water towers—
    a harmonica wailing between the stanzas.

    A Bach fugue made the next attempt intricate,
    lines folding over themselves,
    a theme in one voice,
    answered and answered again
    until the poem sounded smarter than I am.

    For a moment I tried heavy metal—
    all caps, no punctuation—
    but the poem frightened the dog
    and rattled something loose in the pantry.

    A country ballad came easier:
    a lost truck, a lost love,
    ol’ hound gone missin’ again
    repeating every few stanzas
    because some things you never stop missing.

    Finally, I settled into a soft bossa nova,
    each line leaning slightly to the right,
    the rhythm of the ceiling fan
    keeping time overhead,
    a poem you could sip slowly, like wine.

    Hours spent, the page
    a scatter of almost-thoughts—
    the usual drift
    toward nothing.

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    Enjoyed very much specially the inclusion of bossa nova. You have the gift of making much with simple words.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_8_iQn9YgKs
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Eclectic music tastes ! "Hours spent, the page / a scatter of almost-thoughts— / the usual drift / toward nothing." The thoughts of most poets I'm sure... but it's worth it

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    Enjoyed very much specially the inclusion of bossa nova. You have the gift of making much with simple words.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_8_iQn9YgKs
    Thanks Danik!

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