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    couple next door

    The couple next door—
    you can hear their lives rusting.
    voices dulled down
    to habit and sighs.

    every morning 7 a.m.
    the same shuffle to the car
    same half-dead engine cough
    they pull out,
    off to jobs they hate
    in clothes they hate
    for people they hate.

    every night
    same small sad light in the kitchen window,
    two silhouettes,
    one stirring a pot,
    one slumped in a chair.

    tv on by 7,
    off by 10,
    bed by 10:15,
    no sounds from that room—
    not for years.

    you can feel it through the wall,
    the sag of it all,
    the clock-punch life,
    waiting to be done with.

    no need to watch—
    I know the ending.

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    On the road, but not! Danik 2016's Avatar
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    Enjoyed the descriptive poem. I like how you use language,
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Echoes the sentiment from another recent poem of yours... the daily grind grinding down lives, passion, into the dust... Enjoyed

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