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    Does the moon grow green in the
    summer sheen? What I mean does

    the nose like the rose so
    near? I fear it does because the

    moon grows in the summer green when

    seen although I know it’s like
    bliss that summer kiss when our only,
    lonely moon grows green unseen.

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    Alice wrote “Poignant

    I asked
    her what
    that was supposed
    to mean?

    She asked
    me what
    my poem was supposed
    to mean?

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    Where Seamen Dare

    Oh, the sea is a green, rolling girl
    Whose briny, wet kiss lingers sharp!
    From barnacled rocks with wild, white foaming locks
    I can hear the mermaiden's dread harp.

    Ah, she plucks my desire as her song rises higher
    O'er the rustle of hustling waves.
    As she beckons me near I abandon all fear
    At the thought of her dark, kelpy cave.

    How the demon's fell glamor puts my heart to the hammer
    As--God damn her!--her clamor resounds
    O'er the dark, pulsing sea while the lifeblood in me
    Beats a slave to her yammering sounds!

    But sweet Prudence at last lays a hand to my mast
    As she bids me to turn all about.
    Yet I yield with a doubt, routed still by the shout
    Of the pouting, proud ichthyian lass.

    As I steer to the lee something rises in me
    And I turn yet an ear to the trill
    Of the sea's salty song that has borne me along
    And resides in my soul ever still.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Pompey Bum View Post
    Where Seamen Dare

    Oh, the sea is a green, rolling girl
    Whose briny, wet kiss lingers sharp!
    From barnacled rocks with wild, white foaming locks
    I can hear the mermaiden's dread harp.

    Ah, she plucks my desire as her song rises higher
    O'er the rustle of hustling waves.
    As she beckons me near I abandon all fear
    At the thought of her dark, kelpy cave.

    How the demon's fell glamor puts my heart to the hammer
    As--God damn her!--her clamor resounds
    O'er the dark, pulsing sea while the lifeblood in me
    Beats an slave to her yammering sounds!

    But sweet Prudence at last lays a hand to my mast
    As she bids me to turn all about.
    But I yield with a doubt, routed still by the shout
    Of the pouting, proud ichthyian lass.

    As I steer to the lee something rises in me
    And I turn yet an ear to the trill
    Of the sea's salty song that has born me along
    And resides in my soul ever still.
    You call it a bad poem? Oh, no.
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    Quote Originally Posted by mazHur View Post
    You call it a bad poem? Oh, no.
    You are too kind, sir. The poor taste and absurdity of most of the the images would be more evident to a native English speaker (there are one or two off-color jokes, too--not to mention the out of control internal rhyme). But I will receive your compliment with thanks for an honor I do not begin to deserve. Nice to see you again, by the way.

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    Evening Sea

    Searching the fathomless sea
    with quiet eyes
    after sun bows to the eve,
    the moon sits high
    gazing down in
    soft glow content
    on diamond caps,
    Balletic waves dancing
    gently to silent stars
    then kissing timeless shores
    rolling with immortal pleasure.

    It is on this evening
    the restless soul is pillowed
    And my mind lies still.

    (This is bad for it's cliched conventionality. I wrote it when i was in grade school)

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    Quote Originally Posted by Pompey Bum View Post
    You are too kind, sir. The poor taste and absurdity of most of the the images would be more evident to a native English speaker (there are one or two off-color jokes, too--not to mention the out of control internal rhyme). But I will receive your compliment with thanks for an honor I do not begin to deserve. Nice to see you again, by the way.
    You are quite right but modest. Apart from points you mentioned the poem is illustrious in rhthm rhyme and free flow and that was what which was impressive. If you can write such 'bad' poems i feel sure yours good ones will make a bang.

    Thanks n best wishes
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    Where Seamen Dare

    Oh, the sea is a green, rolling girl
    Whose briny, wet kiss lingers sharp!
    From barnacled rocks with wild, white foaming locks
    I can hear the mermaiden's dread harp.

    Ah, she plucks my desire as her song rises higher
    O'er the rustle of hustling waves.
    As she beckons me near I abandon all fear
    At the thought of her dark, kelpy cave.

    How the demon's fell glamor puts my heart to the hammer
    As--God damn her!--her clamor resounds
    O'er the dark, pulsing sea while the lifeblood in me
    Beats a slave to her yammering sounds!

    But sweet Prudence at last lays a hand to my mast
    As she bids me to turn all about.
    Yet I yield with a doubt, routed still by the shout
    Of the pouting, proud ichthyian lass.

    As I steer to the lee something rises in me
    And I turn yet an ear to the trill
    Of the sea's salty song that has borne me along
    And resides in my soul ever still.
    Bum, your 'bad' poem was delicious. Thank you
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Quote Originally Posted by tonywalt View Post
    Evening Sea

    Searching the fathomless sea
    with quiet eyes
    after sun bows to the eve,
    the moon sits high
    gazing down in
    soft glow content
    on diamond caps,
    Balletic waves dancing
    gently to silent stars
    then kissing timeless shores
    rolling with immortal pleasure.

    It is on this evening
    the restless soul is pillowed
    And my mind lies still.

    (This is bad for it's cliched conventionality. I wrote it when i was in grade school)
    In Grade School, you certainly found a talent, Tony.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Thanks to mazHur and Kiz_Paws. And yes, Tony Walt is a genuinely talented poet.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Pompey Bum View Post
    Thanks to mazHur and Kiz_Paws. And yes, Tony Walt is a genuinely talented poet.
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    Often it is said
    Poems can be dull,
    dry and dead.

    But if one simply
    looks upon their own
    face, red and pimply;

    Life is written in poetry
    a language nature wrote,
    be it rock or a pretty tree.

    So before poetry is shunned,
    haiku or half-baked scribbles,
    think and one will certainly be stunned.
    "We can easily forgive a child who is afraid of the dark; the real tragedy of life is when men are afraid of the light."
    -Plato

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    A really bad poem
    Has a good affect
    On the rights you do
    Reversing the defect

    So go on writing
    Scribble on walls
    Anything that comes to your mind
    Anything on your head that falls.
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    But if one simply
    looks upon their own
    face, red and pimply;
    Ha ha, shades of Chekhov or what!!

    Good ones to both emerson1999 and Mazhur.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    Ha ha, shades of Chekhov or what!!

    Good ones to both emerson1999 and Mazhur.
    Thank you very much 😊
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