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Moved the story to the Short Story subforum.
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Moved the story to the Short Story subforum.
Last edited by Aestivius; 08-28-2016 at 03:11 PM. Reason: Moved the story to the pertinent subforum
I realise that this thread belongs to the short story thread rather than the general writing one. Could a moderator please move this thread to the pertinent subforum?
A nice tale, charmingly told. You made a good use of Early Modern English only in a very few sentences it seemed up to date English:"Ben was about to tell his son that such a being was merely made-up, but he remembered his father telling him about tales of it as had previous generations. Perhaps it was no mere tale after all?...His father had told him of the Earthen Kingdom of the Scrummy Lummy and how he would arise from his hole in the ground to seek out folks to make trades and offer them gifts. Ben went by a lot of earth. Three large piles where there. Ben knew that somehow the Scrummy Lummy would appear from one of them, and so he waited. Three long hours and thus appeared a strange little being from the third pile. He had 2 pair of feet and 2 pair of arms and 2 heads."
But I am not native in English.
You can easily move the story yourself if you want to. Just take it out and paste it there. Here you must type five dots or any other symbol.
But people will find you here too.
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Thanks for the feedback
Have corrected the typos. Have moved the story to the pertinent sub-forum with the thread having the same name as this one.
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