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    The Sixth Fish

    Your blurb (the essence of your being,
    Is it not?)
    Said Friendship was your principal aim;
    [Applause! Applause!]
    And when we met,
    And tipped our glasses,
    A century of minutes passed
    With alacrity.
    Halfway along, you excused yourself,
    And while you pizzled privately,
    My eyes roved 'round: to a youngish man,
    His gazers trained on Olympic grapplers;
    To a grizzled gent bullhorning scores;
    To a waitress swaddling forks in napkins.
    Lord, bless this island of innocents!
    The Ukrainian mixologist
    Kept pressing more fluids, but we resisted;
    Excessive lubrication ain't needed
    When convo-circuits are complete
    And fluidly zizz and zazz quite nicely.
    We tipped her well, and tipped our chairs,
    And tripped to your aging Honda Civic;
    You dropped me off—all systems hopeful!
    And now the shocking final scene
    In this overwrought one-acter:
    Another possible deuce reduced
    To just one actor,
    Another closing on opening night,
    Like all the others.

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    Another closing on opening night like all the others. Damn. Beautifully relates the most common subtle feeling of neglect and disappointment, of a night one lays in bed and thinks without thinking, staring at the ceiling in a swirl of surrealism. I enjoyed that turn of events, of the fun and togetherness, to plummet and bash your heart into your stomach with the hammer of loneliness. Thank you for sharing.

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    Just when I think you're brilliant you surprise me with even better use of word play.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
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    would you see me origami

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