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    Smile A Short letter to my High School Friend

    As time passed,
    Our paths parted,
    Never forgetting I have a friend in you,
    and so do you.
    Your curly hair and green eyes,
    Haven’t seen since high school.

    That dark cloud of heavy cape
    Covered everything but your pretty smile.

    I saw the Maple which heard our gossips.
    And the oak leaves of autumn colours.
    Do you remember fat Marga.?
    And that stupid Iota.?
    They all walked down the aisle.
    Couldn’t dodge the bullet we did.
    I’m sure you’ll laugh.
    Miss Silvia said Hi..
    and little kids from Sunday School send you bunch of hugs.

    Btw bestie,
    Congratulations
    On
    Your
    Graduation....
    Sorry for blotting the "n" there.
    I'm happy for you,
    I really do.

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    Welcome to LitNet !

    I love the sentimentality of this poem. I wrote in a similar nostalgic voice the day before yesterday (8/4/2016) on a poem I didn't post on LitNet, but rather on my web page... https://sites.google.com/site/apoetingardenvalley/ : "To Melody - Not On Her Birthday". I like your poem much better (mine needs work).

    A couple of thoughts on the syntax (noted in red) for "Couldn’t dodge the bullet; we did." and the end line "I really am"

    Looking forward to more of your poetry !!!

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor STATELY
    Last edited by tailor STATELY; 08-07-2016 at 12:25 AM. Reason: syntax (mine)
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Hi tailor STATELY: Thank you for reading it.! and Thanks for the suggestions ...

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