migrant people
they roam across
the globe
losing their hope
to an end of time probe
because their identity
scope
is sudden to
anticipate slope
migrant people
they roam across
the globe
losing their hope
to an end of time probe
because their identity
scope
is sudden to
anticipate slope
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
I enjoyed the three poems very much. What I liked best was that migration gained three very different interpretations.I apologyse for my bad knowledge of metricals specially as regarding English poetry. So I'll leave them out of the comments:
Yes/No:
Migration of the working families is bound up with the agricultural chores which each season demands and the agricultural treasures that each seasons yelds. That sense of being on the move is given by the repetition: "Home is somewhere, anywhere".
I liked the wordplay Texas x taxes
Taylor Stately:
An interesting form blending two concepts of migration:
On a more religious, existential level, we humans are all migrants and life on earth is but a station of our migration.
This meaning is indicated in the poem by the parts written in bold.
But out of middle of this dominant idea emerges a second meaning: the migration motivated by political reasons. In contrast with the dominant idea they are seen as a part of the transitory human journey. They are eartly journeys whithin a greater journey and therefore appear unemphasized and within brackets.
cacian
Another harmonious blend of content and form. Cacian´s poem focuses on the migration for political reasons: the migrants that lose their permanent home, lose their sense of identity and belonging, they ultimatelly lose everything.
The form of the poem antecipates too the slope of despair. At the word scope the smoother inicial rythm hardens and the poem seems to tumble down the two last verses.
Hard choice!
Congratulations to all!
The winner is Taylor Stately!
Last edited by Danik 2016; 07-04-2016 at 12:20 AM.
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Thank you ! Enjoyed the other entries also.
Next Subject: Home... deadline: the end of the day in 2-weeks 7/20/2016 PDT
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Home is the place where, when you have to go there,
They have to take you in. Robert Frost, The Death of the Hired Man http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem...s/detail/44261
Adventures, when they need to pause
And give us yearnings to look back
To what we thought we were before,
To people we then trusted more,
Remind us of some home we lack.
We could return we know because
Whatever’s there is there today.
Whatever changes we’ve been through
There’s something that resists what’s new
And cannot vanish in some way.
Deadline in about 25 hours...
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
... about 7-hours to go till deadline; ready , set, write !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Congratulations YesNo !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Thanks, tailor STATELY!
The next topic is "patience".
Deadline: at least two weeks from today.
Congrats, Y/N!
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
I especially love those last two lines. Nice work, YesNo.Originally Posted by YesNo
“What would happen if one woman told the truth about her life? The world would split open.” ― Muriel Rukeyser
(image: walking by crilleb50, deviantArt)
Thank you, heartwing and Danik!
Patience is a virtue,
not a science.
It doesn´t teach me
how to finish
this poem with elegance.
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Thank you, Danik, for the entry!
There is still time to enter this contest.
True to the Faith
to truly endure to the end
implies a patience unspoken
for charity suffereth long
7/25/2016
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 07-25-2016 at 09:48 PM. Reason: format
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Thank you, tailor STATELY! Now we have a real contest.
There is still time for others to enter!
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