Very nice entries! The deadline is now April 25th, next Saturday. There is still time to enter!
Very nice entries! The deadline is now April 25th, next Saturday. There is still time to enter!
My blog: https://frankhubeny.blog/
Pompey Bum thank you very much for the detailed feedback.
some very interesting ideas.
i never thought of masculine feminine in this way.
sound
a particle of light
is without
a doubt
hollow
so to resonate
follow
and to hear
is near
precise
to the ear
so we can
be here
nature
detects
geographic
connects
it is
perfect
to
experts
Last edited by cacian; 04-26-2015 at 11:33 AM.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Time is up! Thank you for all the entries!
Pompey Bum: This is a very nice poem. The eighth line seemed to be missing a foot but it was not very noticeable and may have been on purpose. I liked the acknowledgement that there are some sounds that could not be heard, nor could one hear them for the other. I could sense the anxiety on that bridal morning and what one heard and the other didn't hear reflected that anxiety.
tailor STATELY: I seached for Carkeek which appears to be a park near Seattle. That was a nice description of the nature devotees. I particularly liked the idea of "tidal treasures that may be discovered (but not/lightly taken, nor kept)". One usually thinks taking and keeping treasures is easier than finding them.
North Star: It sounds like a pain killing or life-taking drug was administered and for the person receiving this the sounds dominated until the end. I liked how this started with various sounds and ended with the word "silence".
cacian: I enjoyed the first stanza in particular giving me the idea that sound allows us to "be here", an unexpected line. I also liked the unexpected idea about light being "hollow".
I think these all deserve to win. They aren't easy to get out of my mind.
What I am picking is the person to continue the contest, the winner among all the winners.
The winner is cacian.
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Felicitations, Cacian!
YesNo thank you very much for the feedback.
and Pompey thank you so much
and the next topic is:
telephone
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
The apps that smarten up my phone
Might prove that I am not alone.
My wife knows everywhere I go
And checks in case. You never know.
The yoga class I’ve scheduled there
And photos of stuff everywhere
Are organized though I am not
Aware of all that I have got.
That star? I’ll check. It’s Venus. See?
A text comes in. I let it be.
Occasionally people call,
But hardly anyone at all.
Last edited by YesNo; 04-27-2015 at 12:10 PM.
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anyone wishes to enter the contest?
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Yes, cacian, but I am still working on mine. When is the deadline?
two weeks and thank you for replyingOriginally Posted by Pompey Bum
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Still marrying thoughts and words... thank you for the deadline (And belated congratulations !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
tailor thank you and no problemsStill marrying thoughts and words... thank you for the deadline (And belated congratulations !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
I'll call back in a few days.
hi Peter look forward to that
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Peter and tailor (and Cacian), try the Form Poetry contest, too! A new one just started today.
Pompey thanks for letting us know will doPeter and tailor (and Cacian), try the Form Poetry contest, too! A new one just started today.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
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