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    Poetic Inspiration - (A true story)

    I originally posted this story in the LitNet's short story sharing forum long ago. This morning as I perused the poetry forum it occurred to me that perhaps people interested in poetry would find this interesting too. The events described in this story took place long ago. The story is true. I hope you enjoy it.

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    I have worked for a university for many years, and as some of you may know, campuses tend to be hectic places during a school day. But in the very early morning the campus paths are devoid of the teeming masses which later appear and despoil the mystic serenity of early-morning light and shadow. The cacophony of midday noise has not yet swelled. Birdsong trills unadulterated, celebrating the dawn of another day with an avian paean of 'Ode To Joy', heard by only the granite block walls of ancient, wizened buildings as they sit silently in their ivy covered robes ... and me.

    It had become my habit to walk the campus paths every morning in the early dawn to betake what had become for me an almost religious experience of quiet solitude wreathed in the gothic beauty that only an old campus can afford. One day I decided to embark upon my daily constitutional earlier and during my walk, in the very center of the campus where two paths crossed, I saw an older man walking in the same direction along the diagonal path to my left. It was obvious that our paths would cross. He walked a bit ahead of me and he reached the junction some little time before I did. We looked at each other, smiled, and exchanged unspoken nods of good-morning. I mildly resented the intrusion of this bipedal infestation to my otherwise paradisiacal routine which heretofore I had only shared with the occasional rabbit or squirrel. Then it occurred to me that perhaps it was I who was the interloper since I had now begun my walks earlier than before.

    He was of a bulky, rugged frame and one could envision him in earlier days as a football lineman or a traffic cop. His grizzled grey hair was worn in a flat top style standing straight up and looking all the world like an ashen colored lawn in serious need of mowing. He wore faded, well-worn, light blue denim jeans and coat and I thought it strangely coincidental that I wore denims as well - mine newer and dark blue by contrast befitting, I mused, our difference in years. He had a jaunty step and it was apparent from the look on his face that he shared my love of this time of day, as well as the peace, beauty and solitude of the campus in early morning. The next day I began my walk at the exact same time as I tend to be fixed in my habits and was surprised to find the same man at precisely the same place on the path relative to mine as the day before. Once again we exchanged nods of greeting and this routine was to follow for many years. Sometimes the nod would be returned with a salute and sometimes with a wave but words were never exchanged. I assumed he was a maintenance worker for no professor I knew or ever heard of would be up at that time of day walking the university paths for no reason; also, his consistently worn denim attire suggested manual labor.

    There comes a moment in the life of every writer when the pen stands motionless and the ink falls drop by drop upon the page: the writer sits, frustrated to describe the heart’s pain of a small boy whose dog has just died; when there can be found no words to describe the treachery of a dear friend; when there are no words in the lexicon to describe the feeling of holding his newborn child for the first time. The ineffable fascinates the perceptions, the senses and the philosophies of men. The ineffable is the genii muse which inspires, cajoles, tempts and ultimatly frustrates, for there exist no words to describe the deepest feelings of the heart. Perhaps this is why we never spoke. A knowing smile conveyed an unspoken understanding between us - the knowledge that we both were inspired by the same genii muse.

    After awhile he became a part of my morning experience - a comrade who, it was apparent, shared my appreciation of the indefinable preciousness of these early morning sojourns. It became a sad day when I did not encounter my old traveling companion, and I wondered if he felt the same about not seeing me on days when I was either early or late. As time passed I saw less and less of him during my walks, and after awhile I saw him no more.

    One day I picked up the local newspaper and the first thing that caught my eye was a picture of this very man. It seemed he had died and the article was about his life and accomplishments. So simple and routine was his life, so lacking in ostentatious public display that I had never known what this campus icon looked like.

    I continue my morning walks, and at a sleepy crossroad each morning I smile and nod to an old friend - Howard Nemerov, Poet Laureate of the United States.

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    Pretty amazing experience, and a nice write. The indentity line struck me particularly because it was a Howard Nemerov poem that began my love affair with poetry long ago. Anymore it is no longer possible to know why it had the impact it did. Gloominess and desperation were my companions in that era, and for some reason I had bought poetry books. I guess it is time to read The Fall Again again.

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    Quote Originally Posted by desiresjab View Post
    Pretty amazing experience, and a nice write. The indentity line struck me particularly because it was a Howard Nemerov poem that began my love affair with poetry long ago. Anymore it is no longer possible to know why it had the impact it did. Gloominess and desperation were my companions in that era, and for some reason I had bought poetry books. I guess it is time to read The Fall Again again.
    Thanks for the kind words desirejab. I suppose the thrust of my story is meant to suggest that Nemerov's appreciation of the early-morning experiences I described validated the poetic bent of mind with which I interpreted them. Scenes and events one person may take for granted can be inspirational to another person when viewed through a poetic eye. Once again, many thanks for your response.

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    We take for granted the people we run into on the street. They all have histories. Nice story.

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    Good story, Dato. Here's a picture of Nemerov, on his Wikepedia page: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Howard_Nemerov

    When describing a poet, it's tempting to wax poetic. I think your story could be improved with a little less fancy, poetic writing, and a little more straight-forward story-telling.

    Isn't Nemerov's hair "grizzled" (streaked with gray) instead of "grizzled gray"? Are the buildings really "wizened" (withered, shriveled)? Isn't a "cacophony of midday noise" redundant ("cacophony" is a type of noise)? Don't "teeming masses" spoil "mystic serenity", instead of "despoiling" it (I'll grant that masses, whether "teeming" or not, could metaphorically despoil -- rob, plunder or pillage -- serenity)?

    I offer these suggestions not because I didn't like your story, but because I did.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ecurb View Post
    Good story, Dato. Here's a picture of Nemerov, on his Wikepedia page: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Howard_Nemerov

    When describing a poet, it's tempting to wax poetic. I think your story could be improved with a little less fancy, poetic writing, and a little more straight-forward story-telling.

    Isn't Nemerov's hair "grizzled" (streaked with gray) instead of "grizzled gray"? Are the buildings really "wizened" (withered, shriveled)? Isn't a "cacophony of midday noise" redundant ("cacophony" is a type of noise)? Don't "teeming masses" spoil "mystic serenity", instead of "despoiling" it (I'll grant that masses, whether "teeming" or not, could metaphorically despoil -- rob, plunder or pillage -- serenity)?

    I offer these suggestions not because I didn't like your story, but because I did.
    The fault, my dear Ecurb, is that you are reading the story with the eye of a mathematician rather than with the eye of a poet. I was not "TEMPTED to wax poetic" I did so willfully, purposely, with malice aforethought, whilst damming the torpedoes - FULL SPEED AHEAD! The story is written in a poetic manner because it is about a poet, poetic interpretation, and poetic contemplation of the mundane and commonplace ... and THEN ... it was posted in a thread about poetry. The mathematician says one and one are two - the poet says, eleven.

    Nemerov's hair is "grizzled grey". I know this for a fact because I asked it and it told me so.

    The buildings actually ARE wizened. Several have been nominated for Nobel Prizes.

    There may be a cacophony of sirens, bells, or noise. A Ford is a type of car but would I be wrong to use the expression, "a Ford automobile"? Neither would it be wrong to say a cacophony of noise for noise is not the tread of shoes, or the low mumble of the spoken word, or the audible recitations of wizened buildings, or the barking of dogs (brought on the campus illegally I might add), or the putterings of golf carts ... nay! A cacophony of noise is the entire, sum total of it, the swirling morass of it, the sickening ear-molesting composite of it which putrefies the spirit, dulls the senses and imprisons the soul.

    Last time I looked "despoil" meant to take away attributes which rendered something beautiful, pleasant or attractive. Thus, the serenity is despoiled by arrival of the teeming masses, for a gaggle of human beings despoils just about everything a sane man considers beautiful, pleasant or attractive ... unless, I hasten to add, said gaggle of human beings happens to be a parade of tittering Playboy Bunnies, in which case I say to hell with mystic serenity ... despoil me ... despoil me.

    You really didn't like my story. I just know you didn't. Howard and I are standing at the crossroad sadly shaking our heads at you as if to say, "The poor soul just doesn't get it."

    *Wink* ... and .... Thank you !
    Last edited by DATo; 12-05-2014 at 10:16 PM. Reason: added the wink because mathematicians take everything at face value

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