Please give me feedback on these Haikus.
Eternal is love
Two lonely hearts soon conjoin
Life's romantic ways.
Sickness has bit me
Pricking needles do not pay
For now I shall lay.
Nighttime lurks upon
Flee before he awakens
Or you will be gone
Please give me feedback on these Haikus.
Eternal is love
Two lonely hearts soon conjoin
Life's romantic ways.
Sickness has bit me
Pricking needles do not pay
For now I shall lay.
Nighttime lurks upon
Flee before he awakens
Or you will be gone
Last edited by Bjornnesss; 12-01-2014 at 11:46 PM.
I don't know much about haiku, but I liked your use of end-rhyme in some of them.
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Originally Posted by Bjornnesss
I think very well done.
Find true north;
Justice is but a passing wave;
the beach eternal
do not praise
the man who says less
has more value
everything is energy;
so , what is good and evil when
universes flow eternal
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