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    I'm looking for any kind of feedback on the start of a new philosophy novel I'm writing called, "Love and Fear". Please be generous and fluent with any type of constructive criticism. Thank you.

    LOVE AND FEAR


    Everything in this Universe is something brought through the purities, Love and Fear. Love and Fear, the most simplistic yet most powerful feelings, are the colliding forces that brought about The Universe; an infinite purity that conflicted with an oppositely infinite purity. How tragic a concept it is, just reading it can subdue a realistic mind's interest.


    We are raised, from birth, in a manner that fashions our interests through that of common mediums. Such mediums, for example, are: the media, parents, friends, government, and many outspread sources. When do we come to a point where what we believe in is sculpted from our own, individual ideas? To understand this concept, I will have the pleasure of releasing the constraints society has burdened upon thee, so that you may open your mind and see a better world.


    Remember, I cannot release you from constrained thinking by providing a medium of interest. If I did this, it would contradict the idea of open-mindedness and free thinking because your mind would still be acting off outside information. The goal here is to bring your mind to a state where your beliefs are tied to your own original ideas and thoughts. I intend to awaken a Power that lies within the recesses of your mind, rather than provide a genre these ideals can dwell in.


    It is true, we ultimately choose what to believe in based of the relevance of opinions and facts presented to us. Ask yourself, "How many of these opinions and facts have I proven true through my own experience with them?" For example, many people believe in God, or don't, by experience with ideals they see relevant to believe. Some people question God's existence when experiencing rough times, while others look to Him for guidance. Why is it others' faith are affected and others' faith might not be so easily afflicted?


    Even though, we are presented reasoning to believe in God, our experience effects this medium's reasoning. So, what we see on a day to day basis is the key factor that molds the beliefs of our mediums. It is how we interpret these experiences that sway reasoning, so to speak. This is called perception. What we perceive is the ultimately what we believe and what we believe is as well what we perceive.


    The trick here is to be able to intercept what we perceive with a mindset that makes us able to. Our mindset, what we believe and how we have come to believe these things, is another word for subconscious. Our subconscious is the determinant that separates purities from falsities, or otherwise divides our beliefs. In order to affect our perception, so that we can control the flow of ideals through our thought process, we must first understand the way our subconscious is intertwined with our reality.


    'Subconscious'


    Imagine an empty library. There are no books in this library, but there are never-ending shelves. The books to be placed on these shelves are individuals thoughts. Within these thoughts, or books, are individual ideas that build each individual thought. These thoughts are organized into individual categories that we can call beliefs. So you may possess a series of ideas that make a thought and a series of thought that make an intricate belief.


    One of the ways I personally have helped myself to understand the vast nature of the subconscious is nature itself. "My mind is a resilient tree, with branches that expend outwards infinitely in the space of the Universe. Over the skin of these branches lay leaves of illustrious colour and divinity in all shapes and sizes. This tree will continue to flourish through life and through death."


    An idea is the purest form of creation in terms of thoughts, and therefore can never be changed; it is the spark to our entire process. However, it can always be added upon or removed from its placement in your mind. The same reasoning applies for thoughts in terms of beliefs. A single thought can only be applied to the same belief if it is rearranged. These tie into such a variety of Universal aspects that only you can determine how to apply such a critical thought process. With this being said, I hope to make it easier to conclude the train of your instincts.


    By this point, you may or may not be able to piece together the process it takes to interpret your thoughts, or beliefs, to a more understandably coherent picture. You have a feeling it is necessary to believe in God, but you cannot wrap your head around the concept. The reasoning behind this jurisdiction, at this point, is your most important asset. You want to believe in God, but you don't know how to perceive such a deity. What matters right now is to possess the tools to achieve this want. 'Want' is where we shall start.


    Whatever it is you believe in, I'm positive it should not affect the widespread opinion that want (and not wanting) is the motivation behind any means of action. Whatever actions we take in life are determined through wanting. Technically, even when you don’t want something, you are still wanting by wanting to not want. A critical thought process can be started in the recess of your mind by just wanting, whether you realize it or not.


    Our mind is always collecting bits and pieces of our reality and applying them to a subject that seems most fit for them. If you were to take advantage of these bits of information, by practicing attentiveness of the mind, and consciously rearranging their placement in your mind, the saying ‘think before you act’ just might have a bit more meaning to you.


    By paying attention to our thought process, we start to notice random thoughts that come and go in our head. These thoughts are basically the arrangement of ideas being portrayed as one entire group onto our mind (one step before a belief is portrayed onto our perception). If you don’t make a conscious decision to notice these random occurrences of thought, they will be automatically, or subconsciously, put into the most relevant place in your mind. Basically, most of the time, your mind is working on autopilot.


    Your mind working on autopilot may seem useful hearing it at first, but think about the difference between conscious and subconscious. In your conscious state, you are completely aware of your reality. You see, smell, hear, touch, and taste as a part of being conscious. What does that leave the subconscious with? We might have a slight understanding of the subconscious and its position in our reality, but can we truly juristic what part it plays when it comes to applying to our reality? Just imagine what it does, exactly. Well, we know that it arranges information that passes through our thought process. Why arrange this information? Let’s just assume it’s to create our reality based off what we see, hear, smell, touch, and taste to achieve a want - for the sake of my point.


    Would anything be real if you truly did not believe in it? Truly meaning: there is not one piece of information holding onto the belief of 'anything' being real. Take a second to really think about that. Do you believe in ‘God’, or don’t you? Either way, if you believe in ‘God’, he is real to YOU. If you don’t believe in him, he is NOT real to YOU. Until some lone missionary comes along to convince you to believe in him, He is not a process that is applied to your reality if you do not believe in Him. Don’t limit yourself to just ‘Him’, though. This applies to anything and everything (*yet nothing at all).


    Want is the cross road between two opinions. Want to believe this, don’t want to believe that. In the end, it comes out to whatever want outweighs the other with how much ‘relevant information’ you have for that want, which determines what we choose to believe in. I know - it’s frustrating. Perception determines belief, and belief determines perception. Want determines belief, vice-a-versa, relevant information determines want, and vice versa. Relevant information is determined through…? Please, brace yourself for what you’re about to read. Relevant information is determined through want! Where is all this coming from?! I could be insane, but then again, the only thing I repeat and expect the same result is providing the explanations for this currently undefined logic to help you have clarity.


    Everything is the cause of everything, so we basically have one big contradicting loop. Where does the start of anything come from if it is brought fourth through what it creates? How can something exist without its opposite there to subsequently create it? It basically brings about the stretched scientific reasoning of nothing existing without its opposite. These opposites don't just coincide from nothingness, though.


    It is by the means of a singularity - a solution - a wholeness - the answer to the problem that brings them about. The problem that determines this purity are (dun dun dun) two opposites that meet in the middle and then branch out. This branch out is the start of another set of opposites. Two opposites can be seen as an equation in which we determine the variables (opposite plus opposite) through our Relevant Information to create a multitude of answers that will ultimately branch out to multiple sets of equations (opposites plus opposites). We find the answer of one equation to be the start of another equation. So, we are taken back to the cause of all this mathematical Tom-foolery, which is Relevant Information.


    'Relevance and its Opposite'


    Time to find some W's before this train goes further. Brainstorming is the weatherman's recommendation to untangle that knotted and conflicting meat pile in your skull. What is relevant to you? Is this writing relevant? You've made it this far, so I predict you find it relevant. Why is this writing relevant to you? Try to think of as many reasons as to why it is relevant to you. Relevance may incorporate just about any reason as to why you are reading this. It could be that you are bored, you take interest in my logic, you are enticed by my illustrious portrayal of beauty and elegance (probably that one), because you want to, or you just enjoy reading in general, etc. It's safe to say that if you didn't have one reason to read this, then you wouldn't be.


    Well then. Have you got your reason(s) in front of you, gazing back into your eyes, and prepared to know how you emulated their existence? Maybe, they're too young and need time to mature before you break down the process it took to spawn them? Nope. Every reason you have is a singular part of your relevance to read this writing, and each reason, being a singularity, is concocted of even more reasons that bring you each one. The truth must be revealed! A good way to reveal it is to untangle every reason by asking some W's; I'm just saying.


    So, you are reading my writing because you enjoy this type of literature, huh? I'll bite. Why do you enjoy this type of literature? I know it is a broad question because you could have several answers, but it is time to think broadly as we unravel your mind. Don't worry, the more we unravel, the easier the whole process becomes. It is a 'the more you practice' kind of thing, and with practice comes trial and error.


    Now, take any random reason as to why you, or me, or anyone would enjoy this writing. You find it relevant to read my writing because you enjoy this genre of literature, and you enjoy this genre of literature because [insert random reason here]. With the inserted reason, we must find why that reason is there through the means of another reason. This seemingly endless process is what your subconscious is performing all the time in the back of your head. We interrupt the process when we ask a question about the reason.


    When you ask the question, your subconscious gives your conscious the chance to bring fourth arranged thoughts (reasons) in your head, or most relevant answers to the question. Once you bring awareness to the automatically placed answers (and if an answer is not "I don't know"), you can determine where each one stems from by asking why each are there, or you can rearrange them by stating either which are more or less relevant than another or not relevant at all. Remember, your subconscious has rules.


    If you don't trace each thought down to its root, then you can't truly arrange the seeds of relevance. Put simply, find the reasons of reasons until you hit 'I don't know'. Technically, you do not have to stop at 'I don't know' if you understand why you don't know. However, I will interpret this later on. When you hit the 'I don't know', in hindsight you can't find a reason for a reason. You create a loop of reasoning. You screwed up your mind, good job. Jokes aside, this is the crucial point to affect that seed. At this point, you have become aware of the loop and you can now start to break it down, even remove it.


    An explanation to what it is I mean by reason loop is as follows: you brought the process your subconscious uses to determine a thought to your awareness, you broke each thought down to its core (the 'I dunno' point), and, pretty much as a fail-safe, the subconscious restarts the process over at the original thought which, in turn, makes the original thought the reason for the last reason in this thought's break down. This is the circle of life as far as brain food goes. Starting from the last thought before 'I don't know', you can now move up your list of reasons, in a way, saying, "relevant" or "irrelevant" as you ascend through your thoughts. In time, you'll realize that this whole exhilarating process can happen in a brief second without you thinking too much, so to speak. Deciding that a reason is relevant keeps in place the consciously relevant reason and all those that came before to get to it. However, we are far from finished. Your stiff subconscious feels it is flawless in it endeavors and, much like you, needs a reason as to why you would find its steady work irrelevant.


    You can't just use eraser on the lines of a printed book. Your mind needs jurisdiction when it comes to the arrangement or deletion of items in its library. Otherwise, it has its own reasoning as to why something would be relevant where it is rather than irrelevant. This is why you start from the last reason to a thought. If you keep that reason where it is, then the post-ceding thought will always have that reason to sustain its relevance. Up until you feel necessary, convince your mind of the irrelevance of every reason that makes up the next. This step brings into play a separate sub-process where you replace the irrelevantly placed thought with a relevant thought. Oh, goodness. How do we determine a relevant thought again? You guessed it! Start the process over to determine your replacement. The list goes on again to bulk up with more relevant reasons than where it is to be placed. You can take the time to do this whole process in your head, or I can let you in on a secret. The secret to override your mind without doing the work.

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    "How tragic a concept it is, just reading it can subdue a realistic mind's interest." My mind has been subdued. It's supposed to be a novel, but there's no characters introduced, no setting, and no dialogue. It's more like reading philosophy, and reading philosophy subdues me every time. In order to get the reader to read more, you have to start off with a hook.
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    I was looking for some characters as well. Unless the narrator is the only character.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Steven Hunley View Post
    "How tragic a concept it is, just reading it can subdue a realistic mind's interest." but My mind has been subdued. It's supposed to be a novel, but there's no characters introduced, no setting, and no dialogue. It's more like reading philosophy.
    I agree with Steven Hunley. This piece resembles Philosophy, but it is not yet a Philosophy novel. Sometimes you can do without real characters, real setting, and dialogue, but there are some things that make me believe this is not a novel (it is philosophical, but the feeling I get is reading Philosophy and trying to understand the concepts you are introducing... I am not getting the feeling of being introduced in a new world, a fictional world where I forget myself and observe ”someone else's existence”). I am not saying that's bad, I am wondering whether this is a Philosophical novel after all (maybe we will find in the next chapter). Keep up, and we'd also be interested in finding out whether this is a novel after all or not.

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    I'll be blunt.

    There can't be a worse start for a novel than this. What you have written is valuable and may well be integral to the story but you should introduce these concepts and ideas later into the novel through situations and characters, in order to make them relevant, intelligible and interesting. As it stands, anything more than a small paragraph will lose a reader's interest and it will become very difficult to go on.

    In my opinion, firstly, start the novel with a character or a setting and introduce conflict ab initio. Secondly, at no time should you switch to pages-long obtuse philosophical writing without moving the action in the story.

    My two cents and good luck.
    But you, cloudless girl, question of smoke, corn tassel
    You were what the wind was making with illuminated leaves.
    ah, I can say nothing! You were made of everything.

    _Pablo Neruda

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    Oh my. Readers, I apologize. It is a non-fiction philosophy book. It is not a novel with characters or a setting. It is an explanation of a point of view in a personal philosophy. Once again, I apologize.

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    Quote Originally Posted by teggie View Post
    Oh my. Readers, I apologize. It is a non-fiction philosophy book. It is not a novel with characters or a setting. It is an explanation of a point of view in a personal philosophy. Once again, I apologize.
    Even then, and I'm gonna be blunt, it seems verbose just for the sake of sounding smart because it's a philosophy book. However I, as the reader, have no desire to really come to terms with your philosophical ideas because of that and haven't bothered to read more than a few paragraphs.

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