love can be blunt
highly strung
but then can be prompt
but it can never be
spunned
on its own
all along
it takes
stamina
gratuity
and a kind
to build it
a mind
and of its own
it would wind
two lovers to a
bind
together they would
find
forever to assigned.
a feeling is made
timed
harmony to a blind.
Last edited by cacian; 05-31-2014 at 05:19 PM.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Really like this, I found the first line was really grippining and draws the reader in. I really liked the idea behind this poem.
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe
I like the idea behind the piece. The format irritates me, 3-4 lines rhyme, then they don't there is not real pattern to the structure (stanza ect.) I found that quite distracting. That does not mean it is wrong, just my opinion as one who needs structure to everythingI did enjoy the concept though
"Be careful of quotes you find on the internet, they may not always be true" -Abraham Lincon-
thank you both very much.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
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