Days

[Jerrybaldy]

Write your words, sing your songs,
get up early and worship the dawn and the birds.
Be the best you can, pull your cum face,
swim with dolphins, love someone.
Bunjee jump off some fvcking rock.
Rob a bank, plant pyrakantha, read,
be convinced you are expanding,
improving, being a good sibling, son, daughter, in law, friend, lover.
Save somebody. Feel good in the morning sun,
with the dawn and the birds and your buttered toast.
Live new cultures. Speak new languages. Sacre bleu.
Smoke a cigar, drink a malt, catch a sexual disease,
leave somebody you love, find God, inject, bully, hate,
drink hot water, drown, be the best you can.
Or stay in bed and shout "fvck it" loud.
Drop out or in, or in between.
Send me an e mail, drop me a line,
write your words, sing your songs.
Cut your self to strips, strip for strangers, die young and pretty
or old, drooling lunch on your chin.
Find a way, to blank your thoughts,
and make it through your day.

[Silas Thorne]

Delightful, like a shower of ash on a shiny new holiday home. I can hear Iggy Pop or Lou Reed in the background.

I guess that comma is intentional after 'way' in the last two lines, but it still bugs me.

'cut your self to strips, strip for strangers', priceless.

Adding more to this comment on a later read, I really appreciate how you link ideas together, like 'drink hot water' and 'drown'.As always, appreciate the colour and the bitterness. Harsh, cutting and real.

[cafolini]

What makesyou think that this mixture of positive and negative behaviors would be effective and why, how, in what and where?

[Hawkman]

That all sounds far too much like hard work to me. Talk about keeping busy! Your itinerary is exhausting.

Live and be well - H

[Melanie]

The title should be "ADHD"

[liza]

like

[Silas Thorne]

This isn't Facebook, liza. Why do you like it?

[liza]

This isn't Facebook, liza. Why do you like it?

Oh, I forgot I'm in Literature Forum Should I say something to criticize it ?

[Silas Thorne]

Only if want to. Or you could say what you liked.

[liza]

Ok, I liked ..
Be the best you can, pull your cum face,
be convinced you are expanding,

improving, being a good sibling, son, daughter, in law, friend, lover.

Or stay in bed and shout "fvck it" loud.

Cut your self to strips, strip for strangers, die young and pretty
or old, drooling lunch on your chin.

Find a way, to blank your thoughts,
and make it through your day.


and I liked the title "Days" ..

[Delta40]

Jerryesque! I'm full and your poems are the main reason why I visit this site.

[varsha bhat]

it brought a smile on my face

[blank|verse]

It's impossible to read this without thinking of Larkin's poem of the same name, of course, with its famous image of 'the priest and the doctor | in their long coats | running over the fields'.

It also reminds me of Radiohead's 'fitter happier' from OK Computer.

But the list of imperatives gives an evocative sense of the narrator's existential desperation.

(And sp. 'pyracantha'.)

[Jerrybaldy]

Thanks to you all and an overdue and heartfelt farewell.

[AuntShecky]

Thanks to you all and an overdue and heartfelt farewell.

You're going somewhere?