I like it. Simple, powerful, it gives a feeling of history in the making, and the weight we all bear for humanity's sins.
I like it. Simple, powerful, it gives a feeling of history in the making, and the weight we all bear for humanity's sins.
"The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
"Remember, no matter where you go, there you are." Buckaroo Bonzai "Some people say I done alright for a girl." Melanie Safka
Many thanks, Sleepy & qimmisung...
I'm presuming to bump this in the hope that some of the newer members might have something to say about it.
None too humbly, I'm restoring this to public view for those who joined after I originally posted it.
Thanks for restoring it, otherwise I may never have come across it. Though I can't understand its religious connotation, I like the second stanza very much.
I must create a system, or be enslaved by another man's. ~ William Blake
Captivity is consciousness,
So's liberty. ~ Emily Dickinson
I'm sorry to say this, but rereading this, the vocabulary used seems to have homosexual sexual overtones for me. The 'length and breadth of Jesus', 'warmth', and 'pumping' particularly. But perhaps because I don't understand it, and I was corrupted by a poem I wrote in the past to read into a male believer's personal relationship with Jesus. Sorry about that, just writing what I get from it personally.
I still love the 'history/had been broken into' lines though.
Last edited by Silas Thorne; 05-22-2013 at 10:58 PM.
Well the 2013 bump did better than the 2010 bump ! Pleased at that , but unless I lie the meaning behind this is beyond me. Happy to read anything you post though as (shoot me) I have learnt to.
For those who believe,
no explanation is necessary.
For those who do not,
none will suffice.
Reviving this poem again as I hadn't recalled reading it when it was originally revived, or something.
Anyway, this line struck me as odd: "from now on, / would be held to account." In my sensibilities we became accountable in our pre-mortal existence, and then again in the Garden with Adam and Eve (since our pre-mortal existence had become veiled from us). That said I enjoyed the poem with the understanding that others have a different take than mine.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
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