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    By Unaided Vision

    Sweet scent of wet wood
    comes
    like an ancient sign
    that had been waiting.
    The sky peters out
    into blackness
    and all I see is
    my dream-image of you,
    softly in my blurred
    dream-vision.
    I am near-sighted,
    and the slightest glimpse
    will go unnoticed.
    I need fireworks,
    a train to burst
    into sight, I want
    streamers sparking
    as they cross the moon.
    But
    black and white
    is all the strength
    of this world.

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    confidentially pleased cacian's Avatar
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    very nice I enjoyed reading this piece and what most caught my eye is this line:

    ''I want
    streamers sparking
    as they cross the moon''.


    very nice
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Lykren, I like the stream of conscious flow of this poem. It could be read as an erotic poem, but then again, it may just be me.

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