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    The saddest day

    The saddest day is the day of birth,
    The day you remember time has passed by
    And confined you in a coffin.

    The saddest day is the day when no phone rings
    And you remember how alone you have become,
    Barren from the sorrows of everydays that fly away and leave you far behind.

    The saddest day is when you feel you are still alive
    But yet you know no life lies ahead of you.
    "Existence - what does it matter? I exist on the best terms I can.
    The past is now part of my future, the present is well out of hand."

    Ian Curtis (1956-1980, Joy Division) - "Heart and Soul" (Closer, 1980)

    "My body is a cage,
    But my mind holds the key."

    Arcade Fire - "My Body is a Cage" (Neon Bible, 2007)

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    That is the day when you know that the will (not free will) is the only choice you have to spare you the sadness, i.e., to save you by His Grace.

    I think this could look better as a message without poetical form. Good points.

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    "There is nothing either good or bad, but thinking makes it so." These are only the saddest days if you frame it that way. I'm not going to critique this, but only hope that you are ok.
    I wrote a poem on a leaf and it blew away...

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    This is the worst haiku ever.

    Quote Originally Posted by cafolini View Post
    That is the day when you know that the will (not free will) is the only choice you have to spare you the sadness, i.e., to save you by His Grace.

    I think this could look better as a message without poetical form. Good points.
    Mr. Folini, though insistent on promoting an anthropomorphized deity, seems to be making a central point here. Maybe it just means submit to what you can't control, i.e. the unknown. Carl Jung said it was proved to him that there was a god every time something crossed his willful path. For all intents and purposes, that is a god, innit?

    If this poem is a reflection of your mental or emotional state, this reader empathizes deeply. Whenever Jack of Hearts is feeling this way, the only remedy is connecting with others, ex. doing something for someone else, purely for them, and asking for nothing in return. Ain't that love?

    What's that old Jewish saying:

    "Let not your heart convince you that the grave is your escape; for against your will you are formed, against your will you are born, against your will you live, against your will you die, and against your will you are destined to give a judgement and accounting before the king."

    ... even if the 'king' is just the infinite silence between atoms.







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    Quote Originally Posted by Jack of Hearts View Post
    This is the worst haiku ever.



    Mr. Folini, though insistent on promoting an anthropomorphized deity, seems to be making a central point here. Maybe it just means submit to what you can't control, i.e. the unknown. Carl Jung said it was proved to him that there was a god every time something crossed his willful path. For all intents and purposes, that is a god, innit?

    If this poem is a reflection of your mental or emotional state, this reader empathizes deeply. Whenever Jack of Hearts is feeling this way, the only remedy is connecting with others, ex. doing something for someone else, purely for them, and asking for nothing in return. Ain't that love?

    What's that old Jewish saying:

    "Let not your heart convince you that the grave is your escape; for against your will you are formed, against your will you are born, against your will you live, against your will you die, and against your will you are destined to give a judgement and accounting before the king."

    ... even if the 'king' is just the infinite silence between atoms.







    J
    You will will yourself out whether you like it or not. The only other alternative is suicide. Evidence of the mechanics is paramount. Carl Jung was as much a parricide as Freud.

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