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    5 Poems

    A Tense Dinner

    A short ways north of the resort beaches
    we watched the young boys heave against the sand
    to free their dhow from the land.

    They were not headed far, a safe
    distance: the shelf off Zanzibar.
    The sun which set that beauty scene
    was not forgiving, sweat them lean.

    For hours they took turns to dive
    for octopods whose whorl of limbs
    cling in defense till they break
    the surface and are beaten free, still alive

    and fresh, destined for a ready plate.
    Across the table her eyes rarely met mine,
    though they tracked the speckles of teriyaki
    that slapped against my slurping cheeks.

    Behind me she must have seen
    the boys in their dhows, the gleam
    of that low sun charring them
    into the splendid background.



    Phantom Papercuts (meant to be read aloud)

    Sometimes I feel the imaginary slip of paper
    over the pad of my pointer finger.

    I feel the edge,
    first as it glides over my skin,
    harmless, and I feel
    when that edge finds purchase within
    a groove of my identity,
    begins to dig, and I feel
    as it sinks and separates,
    and finally, as it slices in;
    the briefest violation.

    For minutes this sensation will repeat and so,
    I’ve become quite afraid of every singular sheet
    and its remembrances, especially that thick,
    serrated stationary used for handwritten
    letters, the worst of which are signed

    Always,



    Ambien Entries (WUI)

    I
    The pills are white and small
    But they do not shine.
    My vision is slowing down.
    I hear baseball announcers circa 1945,
    It’s the bottom of the ninth
    And the woman in my pillow case
    Is collecting straw and dirt off the floor.

    II
    The only way we talk is through our arguments in my head,
    Back and forth we jab, I’ve a reply for each lie you’ve fed.
    Then you begin to say the things I wished you would
    And then you say the things that always were.
    I hate our conversations, why must they repeat?

    III
    Please, council, hear me through!
    Why should we? We have lots--
    I have thoughts need hearing too!
    Oh, do you now? What sort of thoughts?
    Well, I don’t know…
    How intriguing. Are you slow?
    I want you to hear me and make me great.
    That can’t be done, it’s too late.



    Best Forgotten

    The park again, of course I should have known
    but must that family be so near, faces
    wrapped in mirth and Christ, a kite? It has flown
    since we’ve been here, deftly arcing traces
    of the wind which I wish would whisk away
    your bubble words, that floating gloat remains
    in spite of young beliefs begun to sway
    too much... 'Remember when we's might help rein
    in this feeling you have lost.
    The family’s
    toy was still in flight until the wind kicked
    and something snapped and spiraling unease
    brought it tumbling to the ground; who knew those
    sidelong sounds of your would wreak such havoc,
    render me useless as a wounded kite.



    Performance Art
    (dead horse metaphor)

    Your stage swirling invocation
    alone is enchanting, but then your monologues
    begin and the illusion grows,
    sprouting upwards and around-
    the crowd draws nearer.
    Family and friends and passerby
    fade in and out as deftly you slip
    and slither between sets.
    Then red is smeared across the wall by me
    or some stage hand and art is born through
    your improvisation so sweetly sick.
    Sometime later the performance ends
    and you and your props bow under
    a harsh spotlight.
    Bravo.
    Now it is time for another act,
    because some lies
    we live, and some
    we leave behind.
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    I'm going to save the rest of these for later, but as for
    Quote Originally Posted by APEist View Post
    A Tense Dinner

    A short ways north of the resort beaches
    we watched the young boys heave against the sand
    to free their dhow from the land.

    They were not headed far, a safe
    distance: the shelf off Zanzibar.
    The sun which set that beauty scene
    was not forgiving, sweat them lean.

    For hours they took turns to dive
    for octopods whose whorl of limbs
    cling in defense till they break
    the surface and are beaten free, still alive

    and fresh, destined for a ready plate.
    Across the table her eyes rarely met mine,
    though they tracked the speckles of teriyaki
    that slapped against my slurping cheeks.

    Behind me she must have seen
    the boys in their dhows, the gleam
    of that low sun charring them
    into the splendid background.
    you had me at "heaved," the way the very casual lines, the low-keyed language led up to it and then "heaved" seemed indeed to heave the poem into its far more intense continuation. On the whole it's a beautifully realized drama and a dramatic turnaround when it turns out to be the backdrop for that romantic scene with which it ends. Bravo!

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    Quote Originally Posted by APEist View Post
    Phantom Papercuts (meant to be read aloud)

    Sometimes I feel the imaginary slip of paper
    over the pad of my pointer finger.

    I feel the edge,
    first as it glides over my skin,
    harmless, and I feel
    when that edge finds purchase within
    a groove of my identity,
    begins to dig, and I feel
    as it sinks and separates,
    and finally, as it slices in;
    the briefest violation.

    For minutes this sensation will repeat and so,
    I’ve become quite afraid of every singular sheet
    and its remembrances, especially that thick,
    serrated stationary used for handwritten
    letters, the worst of which are signed

    Always,



    [B]
    Like "A Tense Dinner," this employs a seemingly casual exposition to set us up for a surprise - in this case, an ironic, bitter one.

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    Thank you Prince. I had no idea whether that second one worked or not. I still feel like I need to create more obvious connections to the end throughout the body of the poem.

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