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    I already told Hawk in PM that this is far better than my effort on the same subject but, then again, I was trying to write mine as badly as possible; this is just plain good!
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

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    Quote Originally Posted by MorpheusSandman View Post
    I already told Hawk in PM that this is far better than my effort on the same subject but, then again, I was trying to write mine as badly as possible; this is just plain good!
    Like Stallings with free verse, I'm honest in accepting my lack of skill in formal verse. Childish rants are for idiots. How will readers take you personally when there is no honesty but deception in your writing? And my God! You're proud of it, Morpheus.
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    Miyako, something you should be aware of: I can laugh at myself just as loudly as I can laugh anyone else, including you. It wouldn't do you any harm to learn to read stuff like this with a little self-deprecating good humour. I would rather not have the carcass of this debate, endlessly circled over by forum members, like vultures, flitting in to gobble a beakful of bile, in any of my threads. The proper place for the discussion of poetic theory is in the Poems, Poets and Poetry strand. Start a thread there and you can all argue to your heart's content.

    If you have anything to say about the relative merits or flaws of the poem, with regard to it's execution, then feel free to comment. However, Clutching some perceived personal injury to yourself and approaching it in the guise of a slighted victim probably won't help in this. If you weren't so sensitive about your rather precious philosophy of art, you would see that this poem is mocking the debate in general, including both sides of the argument. So please, stop bleading your wounded ego all over my thread.

    Live and be well - H
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    Hawk, this reader must be missing some context here? But as a 'stab' at pretentiousness, we'll take it!





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    Thanks Jack, both for reading and the comment

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    Quote Originally Posted by miyako73 View Post
    How will readers take you personally when there is no honesty but deception in your writing?
    ...the truest poetry is the most
    feigning; and lovers are given to poetry, and what
    they swear in poetry may be said as lovers they do feign.
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

    "I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hawkman View Post
    Poems? I've only written one of these. That it mocks pretentiousness can't be denied, but I still don't see the connection to your first comment.

    Live and be well - H
    Forgive me. My comment isn't aimed at you personally Hawk. But there is a theme on this forum at the moment which I cannot ignore which has a certain 'authorial intent' shall we say? I am perhaps mistaken and if I am, apologies all round The poet of course seeks inspiration everywhere and your comments about being able to laugh at oneself are true. I just wondered if it is yourself you are laughing at in this piece.
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    Certainly, in the second half I am and in the general tone of the piece.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hawkman View Post
    Certainly, in the second half I am and in the general tone of the piece.

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    That's wonderful!
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