Our End

[zoolane]

Mmm. Mixed reviews again. Catamite you say that S3 is a cluster of senseless words and refer to the other two stanzas as containing clumsy phrases but use a line from S3 as an example. Can you be more specific please?

Zoo are you saying that the poem is missing something? and if you so, what do you think it might be?

many thanks for you kind feedback.

It not missing that I can see or sense. What I am trying say is for example: When I speak Leanne (the eldest daughter) or reading her message of fb, sometimes I get a feeling that more to conversation then tell me.

It same when sense something not right with your daughter.

[aliengirl]

The note of nostalgia that runs through the whole poem is difficult to miss. It may be elusive to some but I think the list of objects in the second stanza links with the first line of the third. Definitely a Good one Delta!

[Delta40]

Thanks everyone for your replies. Despite a feeling of elusiveness, the sense of nostalgia, loss and beauty was felt in the poem which I appreciate very much.

[cafolini]

One of your best, Delta.

[Delta40]

One of your best, Delta.

Thanks Cafolini.

[AuntShecky]

Your offerings speak for themselves--eloquently.

They don't need any help from the likes o' me.

[Delta40]

Thanks Aunty.

[Buh4Bee]

Missed this little gem Delta.

[Delta40]

I am so appreciative of the kind comments that I've recieved on this poem as it is one that is very close to my heart.