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Thread: My family

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    My family

    I have no family
    a dad who dosnt care
    2 sisters who hates you
    a brother who killed him self
    a over worked mother
    and me so differnt from all of them
    for at least for oneday
    can we pretend to be a family.
    .......just for once
    Everyone can kill, but it takes guts to do it.

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    Yeah I do like it, it is straight to the point. If this is a personal poem, from like..life experience I think you should go deeper, and use maybe some personification or symbols, I really do like it. I would just like to see more detail and perhaps your emotion toward it. Neat though!
    He thinks by infection, catching an opinion like a cold - John Ruskin.

    If I wanted to hear the beat of your heart, I'd rip it out and hold it to my ear.

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    Good poem. Its being, yourself. If ya understand. I have the opposite of that poem and still im sad, so dont feel left out.
    More problems, More poetry.

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    ow. that's sad. painful. truthful. good. is it true? uhm,... if it is, i'm real sorry bout ur brother.
    Don't part with your illusions. When they are gone you may still exist, but you have ceased to live.
    (Mark Twain)

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