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    Time?

    Wondering Aloud

    Wondering aloud
    To the leaves having fallen,
    Each leaving a message to my heart,
    Weaving their own flight downward
    Decorating the pond in all its dressing,
    A glory to God,

    Each shedding and decomposing
    Into this grave my life is strewn
    In the common ground of mankind
    To die alone
    Apart from you.

    Wondering aloud
    To the snow having fallen,
    Heaving a message on my heart,
    Each following the next flake downward,
    Whitening the ground,
    Leaving impressions
    To a person behind me
    Following my footsteps in the snow.


    Time


    The ever-last is the true time
    not concluded by the earth
    going round the sun
    telling them what time it is?

    Only time what matters
    is the short time
    you have to discover
    the everlasting true time
    right now.
    Last edited by ShadowsCool; 08-16-2011 at 11:22 PM.

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    hmmm Shadows , I don't quite get it actually.. :/

    in the second stanza, is it 'that' instead of 'what'? even then, I still fail to get it. :/

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    Twoto,

    Actually, what is the word I want to use. As far as getting it, I don't either. Surprised? Don't be. I sometimes write not knowing what it is. Anyhow, it's a weak effort. I have poems on the burner, but I'm taking my sweet time with. I don't write much in the Summer months. Hopefully in the Fall I will be re-energized.

    Shadows

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