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    The Shedding of our Bodies

    The Shedding of our Bodies

    Death comes naturally to all of us.
    So why do we look so longingly at the photo's?
    With thoughts of us in the grave
    Thinking this is the end.

    It doesn't have to be,
    It continues on.
    In a second
    Your again alive!
    In the spirit
    Free of your troubles
    With no worries.

    Death comes naturally to all
    So why do we look so unconvincingly at ourselves?
    Thinking we got to do it
    Before it's too late.

    Don't we know
    To be brand new
    It's the shedding of our bodies
    That allows us to fly?

    It's the shedding of our bodies
    Beyond where we flew
    We are free to fly.


    The Boy From Nowhere

    They could never understand it
    So they left the boy alone
    In school way in the back
    Beyond anyone's cares
    Just the occasional stares
    Looking back
    Left back!

    Born into a world
    He never asked for
    A mild mannered man
    Very shy
    But no one gave a damn
    They gave him a pair
    Told him use it!

    Tried and tried
    To please to please
    But all he was surrounded with
    Was sleaze and sleaze
    The catholic school
    Didn't protect him
    They just beat him!

    The woman
    In and out his life
    Didn't understand
    When they got to know him
    They left him off
    Couldn't understand this man
    What went wrong

    Where was his God?
    The helter-skelter was all around
    Scary things
    People dying
    He found no God in the world
    He was alone
    Kept on crying
    Trying and trying
    He kept his head up

    His father was a bastard
    Taught him to steal
    Abused and beat him
    A heart of steal
    This meek boy endured

    Even to the day
    His friends say okay
    Forever by your side
    But they never call
    Just walk down the hall

    He's anonymous
    Always inside crying
    He's motivated by nothing
    But the inner burning
    Of his failed heart

    His wicked karma
    Never helps him
    Only people telling him
    Cheer up
    Can be worse

    He's a man without a cause
    Only he understands
    What ticks inside
    No one tries to
    They walk away
    With a smile saying
    You'll be okay.

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    About the first - Have you tried your wings yet?
    About the second - some destinies are just like you describe, "left behind" and it's useless to try to comply.

    Both need some editing work, IMO. Dig the essence, lose the telling. They will become gems. Thank you for sharing.

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    I like ''The Shedding Of Our Bodies'' more.

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    Thanks Twoto

    Ucello: I have to keep that in mind. Too much narrative. Thanks

    Shadows

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