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    Nāga

    He crawls on bed beside his prey
    hissing ''I love you'' in her ears,
    his warm body wraps hers tightly
    like a burial shroud covering a corpse,
    his fangs reach for her bare neck
    to bite and inject the ecstasy venom,
    she moans as the fangs penetrate her skin
    and feels the poison running through her veins,
    her body relaxes and her eyes get so blurry,
    he starts to devour her slowly from head to toe
    until he has had his fill,
    he then throws out what's left,
    scrawny, naked and covered in his saliva
    she lies on the bed, falls into a deep sleep
    with a sense of guilt, disgust and satisfaction.
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    Not buying this! Lillith is the world's first feminist Twota She left Adam because she wouldn't put up with his crap....(you're hurting my feelings lol)
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    hahaa, Yah read about that now well changed the title but but what about the content? ;o

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    Content is ok. Replace blur with blurry. head to toes with from head to toe. Until he has had his fill.
    But I'm still upset :-) I love Lillith....
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    aww, I love Lilith too <3 forgive me :3

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    awww ok! Nice avatar of her.
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    yah beautiful, Adam was lucky but he screwed, just like all men.

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    I just started a general chat thread to see what other people's views are. You're an inspiration Twota!
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    bwahaha, yay me. *proud*

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    I'm definitely in favor of Lilith! and agree with Delta. Just as well you changed the title. With D's corrections it'll be a lush poem.

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    thanks ucello.

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