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    In the Grey-Zone, Miseria and My ABC's

    A collection of three short poems.
    English isn't my primary language so please excuse any minor linguistic fault you might stumble upon.
    Anyways, enjoy : )



    In the Grey-Zone
    Once everything was
    Colourful
    I would laugh
    I would shout
    I would cry
    I would love
    But then came
    The end
    The end of colour
    The end of life
    And the start of
    Tranquillity
    Now I am stuck
    In the grey-zone
    I watch my friends laugh
    I watch their smiles fade
    I hear them shout
    I don't listen
    I feel them cry
    I don't see them
    They tell me to talk
    I stay silent
    As they look at me
    Uncomprehending
    There is no room for grief
    No room for the dying
    For watching
    Reminiscing
    No room in the grey-zone


    Miseria
    Miseria! Miseria!
    Calls the chained and heart-bound bird;
    yelling words that have no meaning
    wishing only to be heard.

    Ridurre al silenzio!
    he cries to those that hear his cry:
    Shame your silence! Shame your noise!
    a mindless serpent; ever sly.

    Parlare, per favoure!
    he begs you when you look away;
    "Speak, or I will break from pressure!";
    from thoughts that lead his mind astray.

    Letizia? Letizia?
    he asks the ones that pass him by
    hoping some might feel his pleading;
    stop and look him in the eye.

    Soffrire rovina.
    he whispers in their ghost-light ears;
    sharing thoughts with pauper reason
    talking whilst they want to hear.


    My ABC's
    A is for Atrocity
    to B is for the Bold
    He who C the Coming rain
    Deny that rain is wrong

    E stands for the final End
    of those who Fail to stand
    the reason looks are worn so Grim;
    is Hating all they can?

    Illegal men are put away
    in Jail with lock and key;
    Keepers live forever not
    while Looters live for free

    the Magic of a partner's love
    Neglect in winter's chill
    Opal starlight radiate
    P*** judgment to the still

    Q is for the Quivering
    Resisting hopeful thought
    Storming nothing, fearing all
    while Thunder brings their fall

    Unprepared and Unbelieving
    V stands lone and Vigilant
    Wishing thoughts of logic reason
    would make the Xeno's heart repent

    Y stands where You left it be
    singing songs of Zappy days;
    wishing true that someone would
    teach it my ABC's

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    Welcome to Litnet !

    Your grasp of English is very good (or is it very well? - just kidding).

    An interesting collection of poems.

    Miseria is my favorite of the three. Especially
    Miseria! Miseria!
    Calls the chained and heart-bound bird;
    yelling words that have no meaning
    wishing only to be heard.
    and
    he whispers in their ghost-light ears;
    sharing thoughts with pauper reason
    talking whilst they want to hear.
    I enjoyed My ABC's until your antepenultimate line. It has a charm of form I might wish to explore as well.

    Looking forward to more of your poetry.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    You do well in your alternate language.

    'Miseria' is a fine poem. The ABC's weren't very kind to this reader.








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    I liked the combination of two languages in Miseria very much.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    I also vote Miseria the best of the 3 - The Grey Zone was like an exercise in negativity without exploring the theme - and the ABCs didn't work for me either.

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    Thank you all for the feedback : )

    Regarding ABC's:
    It was a themed poem : / I wanted to make something that rimmed and had the ABC thingy, but didn't actually have a point to make when I wrote it. I don't like the antepenultimate (fancy word :b) myself.

    Again, thanks for the feedback : ) Much appreciated!

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