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    The Hospice Nurse

    I relish your leathery confessions
    like an exploding fruity burst.

    How natural and stringy is the texture
    of malfeasance which rolls across my dry lips?

    Let my hand smooth such academic demise with visible care.

    As the mercury cools on Meadows Law,
    your husky testimony finally becomes mute.

    The miscarried face of justice releases nondescript babes
    professionally etched in your souless exit.

    Their bloody clots, snagged for years on false statistics cry out:

    You hurt us!

    Such aural rage reminds me of your imminent, sallow end.

    One of seventy six million I'd say because anything less is murder.

    I stand and straighten my uniform, climaxing at your terminal groan.

    Seconds later, I check my own pulse;
    knowing excitement seldom comes packaged this way.
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    Some of this, e.g.

    "The miscarried face of justice releases those nondescript babes
    professionally etched in your souless exit.
    Their bloody clots, snagged for years on false statistics cry out:"

    is beyond my comprehension, but I deeply admire the force and dignity of all the lines.

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    Thank you Prince. Your comments are always welcomed.
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    Ooo, pure evil!

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    I actually enjoy this even though I don't understand all parts

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    I knew it would not be clear when I wrote it because it was based on 'flecks' of injustices I was reading. Again, I threw it all together and boiled it up....

    I should be more serious about my writing but this is where I am atm.
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    wow, this is amazing!
    "real
    loneliness
    is not
    necessarily
    limited to
    when
    you are
    alone
    "
    -C. Bukowski

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    Thanks Paperleaves
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    This is a good one Delta - I actually wrote an extended analysis of it earlier but the internet wouldn't let me post it, and now it's gone from my copy cache because of something else

    See if this works

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