Jelly-bean baby
transposed by this grinning boy,
all teeth and June tan.
Five years since he entered the world
with the fury of a summer squall.
Oh, always emphatic,
fists curled fierce or open with joy,
moods sliding like mercury...
And now, surging forward,
his face tilted toward the future
as though it holds the warmth
of sun.
Last edited by everyadventure; 07-01-2011 at 02:47 PM.
Happy birthday to this grinning boy
a vivid picture
Wonderful, up to - but not including - the last line. The sun is just too pedestrian for what you intend.
love moods sliding like mercury. Wonderful mixed expressions of motherhood EA
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
Pedestrian, eh? I appreciate how your critiques are never trite, Prince, I don't think I've heard the same adjective from you twice
Thanks all for reading.
I like he mercury line too
Actually with a bit of work - the world is in desperate need of a new birthday song
Actually, here in Quebec we do have a new one in the form of the chorus from http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jdf9aqRk--0Originally Posted by MystyrMystyry
Gens du pays, c'est votre tour
De nous laisser parler d'amour
(My countrymen, it's your turn
To let us speak to you of love...)
In place of "Gens du pays" one sings "Notre chere [birthday person's name] or "Our dear [birthday person's name]....
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