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    I sit here a man controlled by fits of fury, pursuits of prurience, and selfish seizures.

    It’s not fair to me to be dismissed by you because of these things.

    What you don’t know is twofold:

    I am trying to control these appetites and

    It is my personal journey to turn the ugliness I am born with and that this world gives me into something I can learn from, into something beautiful.

    There are as many ways to live as radii can be drawn from a centre.

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    A curious, unexpected theme. Requesting acceptance of your anger, claiming that it is unfair to not be forgiven! Original. I would suggest starting with that interesting metaphor of the circle, and carrying it throughout.

    At the moment this is more of an idea than a developed bit of poetry. But this has the potential to be very good indeed!

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    Quote Originally Posted by everyadventure View Post
    A curious, unexpected theme. Requesting acceptance of your anger, claiming that it is unfair to not be forgiven! Original. I would suggest starting with that interesting metaphor of the circle, and carrying it throughout.

    At the moment this is more of an idea than a developed bit of poetry. But this has the potential to be very good indeed!
    I agree!

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    Me too although I did think about my epilepsy on this one and wondered if you would be biting your own tongue....
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