Again,
her scream pierces the calm
and tears the desert
in shreds.
She roams torrid stretches,
urging dust to blind,
wind to hurl,
ravens to crush her,
where his fingers clung,
briefly resisting the abyss,
before his body hit the rocks
that surged beneath.
Last edited by Bar22do; 07-24-2011 at 04:02 PM.
wow! Oh that scream! Those fingers loosening just before the plummet.....What a haunting piece Bar
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
Gracious! *SHUDDER*
Powerful, concise, effective. Good one, Bar.
Live long and prosper - H
Holy....cannoli.
That was powerful, striking, and absolutely beautiful. A haunting piece, for sure. You have such beautiful command of your words!
"real
loneliness
is not
necessarily
limited to
when
you are
alone"
-C. Bukowski
"Again"?
How can we account for this quirk in the human psyche that finds revisiting the scene of a tragedy so-- as your title suggests--"attractive"? Why do we want to re-live or
recapitulate what causes pain? Is it mere wallowing in pain, or is it a way to come to grips with our grief? Hence,
the national obsession (over in these parts anyway, Bar)
on this so-called "closure."
We'd have to pore over book after book on psychology to find the answer, yet this very short and succinct piece of verse of yours speaks volumes.
Well, a visceral answer I hear from most people suffering a recent bereavement is 1/they want to go too, 2/suffering kind of gives them a "contact" with the lost ones... but of course, the subject is complex and so very individual for each person.Originally Posted by AuntShecky
Thank you Auntie to have stopped here and read this work. Warm regards, Bar
Its tormenting to read, it's such an achievement Bar.
In my own interpretation there is always a great deal of "attraction" for one to go after a lost loved one.
Last edited by Haunted; 07-05-2011 at 11:19 AM.
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
Delta, ea, Hawk, paperleaves, so sorry I have omitted to thank you for your comments!!!! I was sure I did straight away! and only now noticed I did not... apologies again.
Thank you Haunted as well!
Best to you,
Bar
Another: a loss poem. Vivid, scalpel sharp. Stopped my breathing.
Nothing much I can add but echo the thoughts of others on here.
Great job.
Shadows
Thank you ucello and shadowscool, I'm so pleased you (retrieved and) enjoyed my recent offering.
Why "another", ucello?
Exceptional.
Of all the gin joints in all the towns in all the world, she walks into mine...
Glad you loved it, Doc. Best to you.
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