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    A Carpet of Bluebells - Baby Blue

    A Carpet of Bluebells

    Thirsty little flowers perked into my eyes,
    My dreams bring down showers from heaven nigh,
    Hear the ring of my bell singing from a chapel hill
    And feel my well drenching forth lush rains on will.

    A carpet of bluebells that dance in the wind
    Matching her lips that gladly sings,
    Light on the ears that remain in Springs air
    With bluebells engaged in a dancing affair.

    Bluebells of every size and width
    Dancing in courtyards taken away my breath,
    Against your blouse, a windy affair
    You and bluebells spinning everywhere.

    Wild bluebells, bright purples and blues
    Lifting to the air in scented flights,
    Amazing nature and her flowers
    With bluebells that stir my heart's delight.


    ~
    Baby Blue

    The wide blue, shouting voices, anger
    Get in line! German voices, laughing
    What have we here?
    Snickering, a baby?
    Laughing, barking
    Shepherds steaming in the sun
    Laughing, shouting... hand over that!

    Baby held in immaculate white glove, a mock kiss,
    Smirks into baby's eyes
    There be no baby's here!...
    Hysterical screaming, barking, German shouting,
    Get in line!
    Mocking, screams

    German officer extends arms, holding baby's tiny hands
    White gloves, tossing in the air, traveling, bare ground
    Blue sky, formless faces, sketches of darkness, striped hollow beings,
    Proud fit officers, blue sky, breath taken away, a thump,
    A burning flame, deep burning, skin boiling, last cries, smoke billows,
    Gasping hearts, mocking and smiling, barking into blue,
    Ashes toss in the wind, a pulp of ashes, time proceeds.

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    I think Baby Blue is the most powerful one here as it reminds me of babies being thrown in the air and shot down by Nazis during the war. Perhaps it could be tightened up in some way to not only reflect its power but a social commentary on the cruelty of humankind
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Thanks Delta40

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