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    Here I am in my creative writing class,
    bored out of my mind,
    really hoping I pass.
    The teacher told us to write a poem
    about whatever we want.
    But I’ve never wrote one in my life.
    So I just sit in my seat and wait for the bell to ring
    and as I wait I think of stuff like…
    Can I juggle a knife and
    did my sister find my stash of Mike and Ikes.
    And now as I check my phone
    I realize that I only have ten minutes left.
    Now that I’m almost done with this poem
    I think I’m actually beginning to like this class.
    I seriously want to go home.
    I really hope I pass.

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    This doesn't pull me in although I did want to lean on one hand while I read it to at least reflect the mood of the piece!

    I'm quite sure you can do better if you put your mind to it.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    I actually rather liked it. It's plain and simple, and while nobody would mistake it for a masterpiece or something great it has a definite charm. I think the plainness of the diction which echoes the speaker's feeling of boredom, as well as the repetition of "I really hope I pass" as it does seem to capture the lack of interest for most kids in school. Then again, it's a poem about the lack of desire for writing a poem for class, so it has a nice meta element to it too.
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

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