One gallant, thank you sir, glad you enjoyed it.
Oh, Sweet Bar, Rest assured my verses are not anti-women, merely anti-marriage. Where would the world be without the gentle sex? There would be nothing to dream about or long for, as we cruel men follow the progress of lovely ladies through the world. But it is marriage that changes a love affair to a life sentence
Live and be well.
Aaahhh Divorced. Of course.
JB
This completely cracked me up. What a great poem. The real wit in it is how hilariously it reals the truth (at least in my observation. My experience in marriage comes from suffering through all three of mom's and then splitting to the other side of the world as quickly as I could). In any case, this is brilliant, one I plan to save and refer back to when appropriate, (as I do with my friends salt lick beside the hunting stand metaphor whenever I feel myself getting weak in the knees). A terrific social satire, Hawk, you at your best. Glad to get back and see you've still got it!
Cheers, lall, glad you enjoyed it
Luved the poems....made me smile and glad I never got married!
Everyone finds himself in the world where he belongs. The essential thing is to have a fixed point from which to check its reality now and then.
Ancient Egyptian Inner Temples
Thanks, kitty, glad you enjoyed 'em. Young, free and single, that's the way to be
Well, you did it Hawk, barely a whiff of a backlash from the ladies of litnet. Must be that singleton charm...
Originally Posted by Hawkman
The Hawk’s on the wing!
The women may sing,
but beware, oh, beware:
this Hawk has a sting!
The satire in this one is deliciously wicked, much more pointed than that of Gus Kahn's "Makin' Whoopee":
"Picture a little love nest
Out where the roses cling.
Picture that same sweet love nest--
Think what a year can bring."
What a great old song that is/was!
Your piece also reminds me of the pun-filled "Marred Bliss"(yes, "marred," not "married") by Mark O'Donnell. I remember reading it decades ago in a magazine, but apparently the work's been adapted into a 10-minute play.(You can find it on "YouTube.)
Anyway, enjoy your holiday! Maybe upon your return I will have posted a "flip-side" reply to this in a separate thread.
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Why such a hater, Hawkman? I never suspected such a cynic lurked behind your calm facade.
"The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
"Remember, no matter where you go, there you are." Buckaroo Bonzai "Some people say I done alright for a girl." Melanie Safka
qim, Me? A hater? Never! As I look about me all is sweetness and light, the buttercups and daisies pervade my soul and the very air is perfumed. My inner cynic is currently at bay and tempers my propensity toward satire and black humour.
Live and be well, H
What is the usual time for a ship to rest at bay,? oh Hawk.
Sweet Bar, Are you not confusing your metaphors? But seeing your preference for a nautical analogy I shall indulge it in all good faith.
Make of this what you will
Live and be well, Hawk.
Not so, I was not confusing metaphors, just extended yours! when I read "currently at bay" a question came to mind which I shared (especially after I also read in my English dictionary "the mosquitoes will not remain at bay for very long")
Best of all as always, Bar
Sweet Bar, I see now the source of your concern, but I was a little confused by the reference to a ship. I would seek to reassure you that I would be content to remain within the confines of my current harbour indefinately
Live and be well. Hawk.
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