Originally Posted by
Bar22do
I got the meaning, Jeos, perhaps because I have some notions of the martial arts. However, I agree with Hill, "the mirror of the soul" is totally unnecessary here, especially as your poem's closure. I'd to without the repetition and therefore would leave out "It's time to fight" (L3). "Silent and invisible" don't need to capitalized, IMO and I prefer "and" to "&". Likewise, in my view, L10 doesn't add to your poem's flow. Try your poem without them. Only a suggestion, of course.
Delta gives you a perfect guidance as punctuation is concerned.
Thanks a lot for sharing, Jeos, greetings.