Cheyenne (poem for a friend)

Cheyenne

You are my friend,
I may not know you,
I may not see you,
Or hear you

But you are my friend

We only talk,
On the computer,
But we talk,
You are my friend.

My friend,
I understand,
What you want to do,
And partly why.

I know,
Your deepest secret,
And I feel,
Horrible,
For what you've went through
You are my friend

And I,
Beg of you,
Please don't,
Don;t do it to yourself.

I may not know you,
But I know you

I know,
You are my friend,
That's all
I have to know,
To say this.

You know what I mean,
Please don't leave,
Please be strong..

Please,
Be my friend

Scared

I'm scared she'll leave,
I'm scared she'll die,
I'm scared i'll cry,
I'm scared.

Tell her no,
Show her you care,
Show yourself you care,
Be a friend.

If you dont care,
Then just leave,
Because you cant help,
I'm scared.

Stand up,
For yourself,
And friends,
Be strong,
Be nice,
Be here,
Be there,
Be a friend.

Stay here,
Dont even think,
What I know you are,
Because your my friend,
And I'm scared.

please tell me what you think, i wrote these and gave them to my friend, i'm trying to keep her from killing herself and she loved them.

Alone

Four friends stand,
In a little group

Three friends talk,
In that little group

One person stands,
Staring into space,
In the little group

Changing

Music is powerful,
My days are full
Boredom is less,
I feel blessed

Things are changing,
I am hanging
Hanging in the air,
Of uncertainty
And confusion

Things are changing,
Soon I'll be a year older,
And a grade higher

People are coming,
People are going

I am learning,
And slowly understanding
What it takes,
To be here,
To be strong,
To be there,
To live long

Things are changing,
I am learning

I will be there,
And here
I will be strong,
and live long

But I'll be the same

welcome to the forum~ i love your poems please i beg you to write more and we can improve together xD

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Originally Posted by forcedtobe

...i wrote these and gave them to my friend, i'm trying to keep her from killing herself...

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Thats a very nice thing to do, forcedtobe. I wish all the best in your efforts.

And these are simple and nice, though i thought they could do better with some more depth and difference. But often when i write anything to my friends i dont care about the qualitative value of what i'm saying so... :)

Quote:

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Originally Posted by symphony

Thats a very nice thing to do, forcedtobe. I wish all the best in your efforts.

And these are simple and nice, though i thought they could do better with some more depth and difference. But often when i write anything to my friends i dont care about the qualitative value of what i'm saying so... :)

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i agree. but of course, there's no beating noble intention. wishing you and your friend the best..

ReynardKitsune
"welcome to the forum~ i love your poems please i beg you to write more and we can improve together xD"

thanks :)
i will, i just dont know how to get better other then practice and reading other poems, which i am trying to do.
i'm glad you like them, i am trying to get better and i think i am getting better about what topic i chose and how i decide to talk about it and stuff, but i still am not quite happy with them..

symphony and amanda_isabel

thanks :)--she's doing alot better, she said she didnt know i cared that much and that she was really going to try to stay here for me i'm soo excited for that

i knew something was wrong/missing with my poems but i didnt know what. i like writing poems and i'm going to continue, so thanks for the little bit of advice i'll try to get them deeper in feelings

is this better? i'm afraid i'll go too deep or something and it'll look bad, if thats even possible on the too deep part..but here it is..hope you like it

Amazing

I'm beggining
To love this word
When I read it,
My heart flutters
I feel
For that slight moment,
Cared for
And my thoughts,
Are less cluttered

I'm really liking this guy...
He seems to understand
And care,
He seems so sweet,
Kind and smart

And what he says to me..
I read it and,
My heart smiles,
Even for that slight moment,
I read what he says,
And I melt

When you step outside,
And the bright sun hits you
For that slight moment,
You seem to feel that warmth
On the inside, you feel it
For that moment,
Then its gone

When I read those few words
From him...
Its like the sun
Hitting me, but
Longer then just a moment
Or two

And when he says it hurts him,
To know how I feel inside,
I just want him to stop hurting
For me, I want him to be happy

I want to discover who I am,
Maybe I will with his care,
In his words...

wow ,Its gr8

thanks mahishi :)

wow a leap improvement! i liked it

thanks Reynard..i'm trying to get deeper, glad its better

i am wanting to show a poem to someone, i really want to show him this last one i wrote on here..is there anything you think i should change before i show it to him? its this one:

Amazing

I'm beggining
To love this word
When I read it,
My heart flutters
I feel
For that slight moment,
Cared for
And my thoughts,
Are less cluttered

I'm really liking this guy...
He seems to understand
And care,
He seems so sweet,
Kind and smart

And what he says to me..
I read it and,
My heart smiles,
Even for that slight moment,
I read what he says,
And I melt

When you step outside,
And the bright sun hits you
For that slight moment,
You seem to feel that warmth
On the inside, you feel it
For that moment,
Then its gone

When I read those few words
From him...
Its like the sun
Hitting me, but
Longer then just a moment
Or two

And when he says it hurts him,
To know how I feel inside,
I just want him to stop hurting
For me, I want him to be happy

I want to discover who I am,
Maybe I will with his care,
In his words...