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Thanks for the great prompt and granting me the win Danik and thanks tailor and yes/no for the congrats I really loved both of your poems.
The next subject will be 'Crossing Borders' use it as you may. I can't wait to see the different interpretations you all come up with. :)
crossing borders: california
oregon with its
familial bones is
foreign ground -
a land to pass through
to the comfort of my
memories of youth
having visited
leaving nevada for
home in california
is like giving one athirst
a spring
in which to wash
arizona has no
memories for me
though she of me
to me just a land
too far; too removed
from the sea
I lack the desire to
leave for the née
aztec nation - a land too
in love with itself
to love its people
leaving california is
like love unrequited -
like being smothered
by a surrealistic pillow
9/4/2017
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Thanks Tailor, what a great start! That's really set down a challenge. :)
The boundary is the part that’s strange,
More different than sides.
A river, mountain, moat or wall
May halt the movements of us all
To keep us occupied.
We're both of this land.
I was dispossessed and need a home.
You too were here since dot
And now are dispossessed.
Even if I gave my hand across the line
How could you trust, and take it?
...and we have a contest! Three fantastic entries so far. Lets see how many more of you can step up to the challenge. :)
Just realised I never set a deadline for this contest so lets give it until midnight on Sat 23rd of this month. (BST) Plenty of time for those of you still thinking about it to join in. :)
One more day if anyone wants to get in an entry!
Well. After long deliberations I must say this has not been an easy choice. Thanks to all three of you for such wonderfully thought provoking entries.
tailor STATELY - a poem that really took us on a journey. Loved the way it carried me along and that last stanza was just brilliant!
YesNo - very profound. Physical boundaries are much easier to cope with than those we can not see.
spikepipsqueak - very relevant in todays political climate I fear. It might be short but this really touched a nerve and made me think.
And the winner is......... spikepipsqueak!!
Congratulations spikepipsqueak !
Congratulations spikepipsqueak!
Congratulations spikepipsqueak! I hope you choose an instigating prompt.
Wow! Thank you, Cassie. I really enjoyed the other two. Sorry I'm late responding, can't get here much.
I would love to see responses incorporating the words "energy debt". Take it where you will.
Is a month deadline usual? 1st of November, then?
The energy one has to burn
To pay the debt one has to pay
Should not be more than one can earn
While burning stuff throughout the day,
But creditors--they never learn--
They’ll lend more money anyway
Since that’s the only way they’ll see
The older debt eventually
Returned with interest while it can,
Before the bull has hit the fan.
I like what you have to say and the way that you say it, YesNo.
Just bumping, in case there are others looking for the thread.