confused! so um how can i tell if my images work? can somone help?
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confused! so um how can i tell if my images work? can somone help?
if what you've written evokes something, your images work. your words can make a picture, or make us think, and even if your haiku has an odd ending, the next person can generally make do just fine with your last line. just jump in at some point and build off of the last posted haiku in the manner that mono showed up above.
good luck. :)
Give a smile, void shines
far be it for stones to turn
themselves into graves.
Themselves into graves
The idle minds push, unknown,
Like living in caves.
Like living in caves
the jellied dreams of empty capes
curl into themselves.
Curl into themselves,
Void spaces evolve while
Inhaling us in.
Inhaling us in
surely they can't stop their breaths
rabid for our love.
Rabid for our love,
The sea hushes to listen,
And petals spread wide.
And petals spread wide
And arms spread wider to lift
The courage and scents
The courage and scents
Of confusion mixed with fear:
Sex dreams of soldiers.
Sex dreams of soldiers
Whilst soldiers fear self-defeat
…Hallucinations…
Hallucinations.
My silent screams never heard;
Prisoned in your eyes.
Prisoned in your eyes.
Your vision makes my movement
I live in your sight
I live in your sight
Poisoned, emptiness appeals
Nothing loudly calls
Nothing loudly calls,
But consciousness of my mind,
Singing its chorus.