There are many good poems for this photo. I forgot to say that. I wanted to commend everyone. It sure will be hard to judge. Everyone did such a fine job. The photo must really have inspired you.
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There are many good poems for this photo. I forgot to say that. I wanted to commend everyone. It sure will be hard to judge. Everyone did such a fine job. The photo must really have inspired you.
Thanks for your kind comments, Janine. I know I've been impressed with the contributions of the other poets on this thread. I hope you'll think about joining our happy band in the next round. Even if you haven't done much poetry, you may find it really enjoyable, and we're always glad to add a new voice to the mix. :)
Thanks Petrarch, so kind of you to ask me to join in. I am afraid I am a better artist, than a poet. I dapple once in awhile in words, but not too seriously, and later read what I have written and feel it is trite. We will see. Maybe I could come up with something simple to start with. It seems that people are naturals to post such original ideas one after another. How long does it take to write one? Or how long would one have to do it? It seems in reading them, they were just dashed off of ones head. But that is not to say they certainly are good and worth reading, because they really are! Quite entertaining to have found this thread. Thanks again everyone!
OK KIDS. CONTEST IS OFFICIALLY CLOSED. CERRADO. PUNTO. THE JUDGMENT (hehe) WILL ARRIVE SOON.
But, let me just say--you guys are great, really. Not only do you have souls (if you don't, at least you've infused your poetry with some [jk]) but you are talented, really. I will judge very soon. There will be no real basis for my judgment/ it will be subjective but well thought out and base don poetry not history of victories.. I apologize. I wanted to make sure everyone had a chance, and I have college apps. I hate my life. cheerios.
i just realized that my previous comment makes no sense.
holograph - what did you mean at the end? About hating your life? Anyway, I read your profile and "Demian" was my favorite Hesse book, the first I read. I read it many many years ago. Is the signiature on your post a quote from the same book? Just curious?
What happened to the poetry contest? When will it be judged. I been awaiting the results.
Can I join the next contest? I just discovered this thread and regretted of not having found it sooner...
Of course. Just wait for the winner to post the new picture.Quote:
Originally Posted by toni
When is Holo going to announce the winner?
i was wondering too....Quote:
Originally Posted by Janine
Toni, welcome and certainly join in. It is fun. Bascially I am still an observer, but it will be interesting to see new talent in here. The poems so far have been really great! Can't wait till a new photo is picked. Hope to read one of yours soon.
Thanks, Janine! I can't wait for the next photo either... Hope it won't take long..
Alright, I'm sorry to have kept you waiting. Life has been a bit hectic for me lately. Janine I was only joking about actually hating my life. When I’m under a great deal of stress my mind becomes a bag of noodles. Anyway, yes Hesse is one of my favorite writers, and the quote is from Demian. :)
I am not going to over-comment on the poems. Just briefly highlight some points to preserve each one’s integrity. This, as always, was a difficult decision. I take off my imaginary hat to you all--you did a fantastic job. Poetry is a painstaking art, I know that. There will be no negative comments from me by the way, only happy thoughts. However, what I was specifically looking for was a cold anguish omnipresent in the painting. The nothingness, the representation of Christ as the suffering of mankind. Etc.
And now…
MIR- your poem was great. Short and sweet with undertones of foreboding. “Empty Eucharist...lay your burden down.” Very nice. Kudos.
PETRARCH- descriptive, beautiful, story-like, holding true to your style. Capturing an anguish evident in the painting--As the Son lowers his head over the bending world.
Unseen nails suspend incarnate anguish
While the bones snap and muscles tear
And the neck, limp with suffering, drops the head.
[Awesome descriptions.]
FEMME- welcome to the poetry contest. good job on your first entry: pretty, very hymn like. It was very sweet and it rhymed, which was cute and refreshing.
He floats softly
In vast skies of gray
Because He made a sacrafice
On the cross where He lay.
TALIESIN- Interesting and pretty well done. I especially liked your spurts of rhyme in the middle. Oh, and "where the hell is my left foot?"ßlol.
Last chance of
bading goodbye
to the blue skies
which won't be here tomorrow.
Sunset of the world.
The Son is free.
RIESA- mmmmm. Beautiful. Every line is quotable, that’s what I like. Descriptions are rich. Nice rhythm, as well. Very, very well written. Oh, and there is the overtone of writhing anguish that I was looking for.
and
forget to sing as
blades dig, scrape earth and tender flesh,
flesh bathed in war's craze,
hate in hot and sultry waves,
the grim disdain of God's soldier
meting out ordered death.
In the colloquial language of my peers, I must say “word.” to this poem. If you don’t know what that means, it’s ok. It means I think it’s fantastic.
VIRGIL-Also a fascinating, very well written poem. Excellent descriptions, also all quotable. You, mi amigo, are a poet. I like the thought pattern in this one, and the conflict Christ is having with himself.
No, the flesh is gone, but the rivet remains.
The spinning earth, the expanding universe,
The hills are fixed to earth.
Yes, that’s all we have, isn’t it? Great job.
Wait, so who wins this one?
There are no rankings or winners or losers in poetry. :p
Congratulations, you all win. :bday_2:
But I would like Riesa to pick the next picture. :thumbs_up
Thank you Holograph. That was fun!! All poems were very good. It would have been tough to judge, and i'm glad it wasn't me. Pick a good one, Riesa.
I agree, every entry was fantastic. It was PL's that I wanted to talk about. :blush:
That excerpt you took out was good, Holograph, and there were so many ideas there . . . one of the first things that struck me about the picture was the lack of the INRI on the cross - for some reason or another, so I was excited that she mentioned it. :D
Maybe I'll just send you a PM Petrarch's Love. :)
I look forward to attempting to participate in the next contest. Hurry up and pick! :)
Congrats Riesa! And great job everyone else too. I sympathize with the difficulty of Holo's judging task. Looking forward to the next pic.
Thanks for showing the interests, David. I'll initiate the new option of opening ancillary threads for commentary by starting up a thread for my poem for this round where you and anyone else with a mind to can comment and question. It would be great if some of the other entries wanted to similarly start up threads so we could continue discussing this really good batch of poems even as we move into the next contest round. :)Quote:
That excerpt you took out was good, Holograph, and there were so many ideas there . . . one of the first things that struck me about the picture was the lack of the INRI on the cross - for some reason or another, so I was excited that she mentioned it.
Maybe I'll just send you a PM Petrarch's Love.
WooT! nice job, Riesa, and everybody else!! and welcome to all the new people joining this thread; it's really exciting to get some new poets.
Petrarch, that's a very good idea about posting the poems on new threads - i'll start a thread on mine, and anybody can comment or bash it all they want. :D
also, Holo, those were lovely critiques. thank you.
all of the entries were amazing, it was a difficult image to write on. Thanks for the comments, holo, and entrusting me with choosing the next picture.
I'll try to make the new image as challenging as holos. I'm looking forward to all of the new contestants entries too, and I foresee a difficult decision ahead of me.
Congratulations all! Good job. Some great works!
Oh, yes yes yes, I'm very interested. It's just things to do, little time and... may I say I don't dare participate for I think Xamonas' poem is unbeatable. Waw I like it so much, it was a real delight.
I continue reading you all. It's really a pleasure.
Laura
Oh, yes yes yes, I'm very interested. It's just things to do, little time and... may I say I don't dare participate for I think Xamonas' poem is unbeatable. Waw I like it so much, it was a real delight.
I continue reading you all. It's really a pleasure.
Laura
I don't understand what's happening: I'm trying to reply to another thred and I find my messages here!
:crash:
Well, I'm new and I hope you help me with this forum.
To holograph - this is really great since I feel this way very often, too often really. Nicely expressed in your quote - "When I’m under a great deal of stress my mind becomes a bag of noodles." Great analogy - all those noodles swimming around in ones head!
WELCOME - to all the new people expressing a desire to write a poem. Can't wait to see what you come up with. So far, I am on the sidelines observing and reading them - very enjoyable! Last contest was amazing and no wonder a winner could not be picked. I guess it was a tie. Well, that is fine, too. Everyone was a winner - how nice:D
Good points brought out on your critical reviews - holograph. Bye, the way, glad you don't really hate your life. No apologies necessary - everyone is busy with real life...not just virtual life, on this site.
Any luck finding a new photo - who's picking - is it you, Riesa? Anxious to see the next photo you post. I like your avatar.:)
:banana:.
[mm, Janina, I have to do college applications, so I am completely out of it. Essays, essays, essays, and I don't know what the heck to write about. Life is an "empty Eucharist" sometimes, isn't it? :)].
Okay guys: after much deliberating and google image searching I decided on:
http://i71.photobucket.com/albums/i1...sa/SDM1524.jpg
I'm looking for this empty mirror to be filled with honesty and heart when all is said and done, don't be shy, indulge your vanity! Every artist must create a self-portrait at some time or another, now's the chance to show the world, or at least the interested readers, yourself. :D "Know Thyself", urges Plato, (I think it was Plato, anyway.)
What a fabulous idea. Too bad you can't participate yourself, Riesa. I would like to see what ou come up for yourself. ;)
I'll write my own version and give it to you for christmas. :lol: ;)
How much time have we got?
how about December 4th? that gives two weeks plus a weekend. That's not set in stone but we could begin to wrap it up around then. Is that enough time?
The old rule Riesa was when we had enough 5-6 entries to have a reasonable quantity. I have to admit I'm terribly slow at this.
well, it's flexible. we'll see how it goes.
I'm trying to reply here, what's happening?
I don't understand what's happening, I was replying in another discussion and unce submitted I find my reply here, in a different thred.
Astonishing. Could you help me?
I'm very interested in this matter and I liked poem with the rhythm, I can't say the author now....Quote:
Originally Posted by blondeatheart
Laura 11--What are you trying to reply to? Was it to a post earlier on this thread perhaps (a thread is made up of multiple pages)? I noticed you quoted from something Blondeatheart posted back in May and I thought perhaps you didn't understand that you can only post a response after the most recent post on a thread. If you hit the "post response" button under the post you quoted from blondeatheart on the first page of the thread then your response would logically end up here on the last page of the thread. If you want to make comments on earlier posts you can do so by quoting them. Incidently, I haven't seen Blondeatheart on the forums in a few months. I don't know where she's got to.
If you mean that you're on a completely different thread with a different topic then maybe you should try asking Logos or one of the other mods for help with the problem. Hope this helps.
By the way, welcome to the forums! I hope you enjoy it here. :)
I'm very interested in this issue, go on please.
Riesa--What an interesting idea. I'll have to give this one some introspective thought (either that or stand in front of the mirror and make faces for a few hours :lol: ).